KH- A New Begining

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Should I keep on making more chapters?

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  1. Dinny I am Anime ( ⚈้̤͡ ◡ ⚈้̤͡ )

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    Well, I got inspired by reading all those stories in the Creativity Corner. So I've decided to make my own! ^^ So here it goes!

    Chapter 1: The So Called 'Star'
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    Kairi, Sora and Riku we're playing off in the islands, having fun in their childhood years.
    "Tag your it!" shouts young Kairi tapping Sora on the shoulder, then runnning to Riku.
    Sora laughed happily then chased after both.
    They continued to play until there was a bright, bright light that flashed from the sky.
    They all stopped to look at it. Then it seemed like a falling star, the 'star' splashed into the water- then everything seemed back to normal.
    "what was that?" Riku says looking over at Kairi and Sora.
    Kairi shrugged not knowing what it was.
    "Maybe it's just nothing." Sora says, then dashes forward tagging Riku. "aha!" he shouts.
    "hey, no fair that was an unexpected time out!" Riku says.
    Kairi giggles and starts running, and all continued to play.

    The following morning they went out to play again, but wait! There was something laying there by the sea shore. Due to three's curiousity they ran over to it. There laid a little girl- looking like their age. She was dripping wet and seemed unconsious.
    "Is she alive?" Kairi says.
    "looks like it, but I don't know..." Riku says.
    "I think I'm going to go call my pa-" Sora says, but unable to finish his sentence.
    The girl seemed to be waking up, her blue-green eyes opened looking into the sky. She sat up and looks Kairi and the others. She remains silent.
    "hiya." Kairi says smiling."Name's Kairi"
    "Riku here." he says.
    "and Sora, are you ok?" he asks.
    The girl nodded.
    "where are your parents? and where do you come from?" Riku asks politley.
    "I-I don't have parents and I come from..from...???" she says, it seems like she came right out of no where...with no past.
    "well...what's your name then?" Kairi asks.
    " My name?" she repeats.
    "yup." Sora says.
    "Name's Sharix." the girl said.
    The three smiles at her. "Nice to meet you Sharix!" they say happily.
    She smiled back at them.
    A new story has begun, but still....what was the falling star? Could it be her?


    Well, that's the start of it! I might continue though...or not...don't really know..
     
  2. eentje Traverse Town Homebody

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    Wow, can't wait to reed more! I like it!!!:shocked:
     
  3. Dinny I am Anime ( ⚈้̤͡ ◡ ⚈้̤͡ )

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    Thanks! :D

    Chapter 2: The Story Finally Begins
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    Sharix got up with help from the others of course.
    "So your all alone?" Kairi asks.
    "yes." she sighs sadly.
    "Come! Follow us." Sora says and runs to his house.
    The three follow him, running as well.
    "mother!!" Sora calls.
    "yes?" she asks her voice sounding like it has come from the kitchen.
    "hi Aunt Vallerie." Kairi and Riku says.
    "oh! Sora why didn't you say you had friends over?" Vallerie says running towards them. "And oh, who's this little girl?" she adds seeing Sharix.
    "that's Sharix." Sora says.
    Sharix smiled at her. "hello." she says.
    " Well, hello to you too, where are your parents or other family members?" Vellerie asks.
    "she hasn't got any, and she doesn't know where she's come from." Kairi explains.
    "oh..." Aunt Vallerie says understandingly.
    "hey, mother? Can she live with us? please- she's all alone." Sora interupts.
    Aunt Vallerie paused for a while. "well, why not." she says smiling.
    "woohoo!" Kairi says jumping.
    "alright!" Riku said happily.
    Sora smiled.
    Sharix smiled too and hugged Aunt Vallerie. "thankyou." she says.
    she embraces her back smiling.

    Now Sharix has lived with them for a year now. Sora has been treating her like a sister. Kairi and Riku has been closer to her too, they all became instant bestfriends. They were all having fun outside.Though Aunt Vallerie has been trying to find out why it seemed like Sharix popped out of nowhere.
    "hello." a voice suddenly said from behind Vallerie.
    She had to turn and look who it was. There was a girl with pale-olive hair and long rabbit-like ears--which obviously meant she was a viera.
    "hello, my name is Risha." said the girl, who was standing right infront of a bright, bright door that seemed like it popped out of nowhere aswell.
    The girl smiled at her sweetly.


    Risha....? Who is this girl? And is she conected to this situation? Find out in my next chapter! (again if I make one)
     
  4. C This silence is mine

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    This story is awesome but maybe a bit short, no?
     
  5. Dinny I am Anime ( ⚈้̤͡ ◡ ⚈้̤͡ )

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    yeah....that's what I though XP

    Chapter 3: Two girls one story
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    "wh-who are you?" Aunt Vallerie says.
    "Like I've mentioned before, my name is Risha. Though you may know me as Sharix around here."Risha says.
    "no way. That's absurd! I know who Sharix is, and she isn't you." She says.
    "no,no. You see we are different, but our story is very much desame. I've been with her ever since." Risha said.
    "Story? Tell me about this." Aunt Vallerie demands.
    "Not actually a stoy, like our past." Risha says.
    "Past." she repeats. "please, tell me about this.i'm begging you." she adds.
    "yes, that's why I'm here. You see, our hearts are connected. I'm th light and she's the darkness. Together we have a strong heart. Sharix used to live with a family but got transported here. I'm guessing it was her destiny to be here, while she was being transported her memories were taken away from her. And only I know them, along with some other people. Very limited really." Risha says.
    "Can't you give back her memories?" Aunt Vallerie asks.
    "that's beyond me, I can't return to her just yet." she says.
    "and why not?" he asks.
    "Now that has to be secret. Sharix never actually knew me, I never had revealed myself to her-even if I tried, it would never work." Risha says.
    "her life is complicated, now what about you?" she asks.
    "me? Well, I'm always with her, like I said- I'm part of her soul. Still, Sharix is very clueless about this situation. So do not ven try to ask her anything about her past. And never tell her anything I've told you, I will myself when the time has arrived." Risha warns.
    "Alright." she says.
    "And don't tell Sora, Riku and Kairi either. Besides their to young to understand." Risha says.
    Aunt Vallerie remains silent, she couldn't really believe it.
    "It's my time to leave now, good bye Aunt Vallerie." Risha says and disappears from the bright door.

    "Mother! We're home! What's for dinner?" Sora calls entering the house.
    "Aunt Vallerie! Where are you?" Sharix calls.
    aunt Vallerie gets up and heats some food into the microwave. "It's leftover night so we're having same-old-same-old." she says."I'm in the kitchen." she adds.
    The two children sit down on the dinner table playing a little hand game.
    Aunt Vallerie looked at them, then lay her eyes on Sharix. "Risha." she says softly then prepares dinner.
    Then all start eating.
     
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    Looks good darkheart! :D So Risha is Sharix's Somebody.
     
  7. Dinny I am Anime ( ⚈้̤͡ ◡ ⚈้̤͡ )

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    OCC: well.....you'll find out soon enough.
     
  8. khmage1918 King's Apprentice

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    Wow! These semi-long chapters are very interesting. How cool. I like it, keep making more! But make sure as you write, to have fun!
     
  9. Dinny I am Anime ( ⚈้̤͡ ◡ ⚈้̤͡ )

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    Thanks sora is cute, and I will! Oh and here'd the next one!

    Chapter 4: Risha, The Girl Between The Walls
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    It has been four years since they first met. Now that they were 8 and riku of course was 9 now. They still loved to play together, all the time.
    Sharix picked up speed and kept running after Riku, "tag!" she shouts tapping his back.
    "again?! That isn't much fair! You just tagged me before." Riku says.
    Sora accidentaly smacks into Riku.
    "tag, now your it! ha!" Riku says then ran away.
    Sora ran to Kairi and tagged her. "tag! Now your it!" he says.
    "let's stop now, why don't we go swimming?" Kairi suggests.
    "alright." Sharix said taking her shirt and shorts off, her bathingsuit under.
    They all had their swimmingsuits under so they just took off their shirts and shorts and skirt- for Kairi of course. Then they all ran to the sea and swam.

    Risha appeared infront of Vallerie. "hello, again." she says.
    "why hello Risha, Is there something wrong?" she asks.
    "no, nothing at all is wrong. It's just that the time has come for our Destiny to take place." Risha says.
    "what does this mean?" Auunt Vallerie asks.
    "Nothing, just be prepared." Risha says disappearing.
    "Risha!" Aunt Vallerie calls not wanting her to go. She sighed then looked out of the window, she saw the four having fun and playing together like any other day. "The time has..come?" she repeats. Then just watches them all.

    "Risha!" a man's voice calls.
    "alright, alright I'm comming!" Risha says then walks over to him.
    "where have you been?" he asks.
    "my Aunt, well her Aunt. Why must you always ask Ansem?" Risha asks.
    "Stop giving them more infromation about the real-deal!" Ansem exclaims at her face.
    "heck why not? She's comming back soon enough anyway!" She retorts.
    "It's different, Risha. Your one of the only Nobodies that keep their human from- and the nobody filled with light. And Sharix is the only heartless that ever kept her human from for all I know." Ansem says.
    "You think I don't know that?"She backtalks.
    Ansem just sighed.
     
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    Somebody name but a Nobody and Nobody name with a Heartless body? I think that's what I'm getting.
     
  11. Dinny I am Anime ( ⚈้̤͡ ◡ ⚈้̤͡ )

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    hehe..yeah, well I wanted to invert it and all, cause I was totally bored XP

    Chapter 5: The Time Has Come
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    A week has past and the kids have continued to play together, though today they visited the secret place.
    "C'mon lets all draw a little something today." Sora suggests.
    "yeah." Kairi agrees grabbing a rock.
    'why don't we all draw something together." Riku suggests instead.
    "ok." Sharix just said.
    They all drew each other and placed a heart in the middle. Inside there was a paopu fruit.
    "Well, now that we're done why don't we go outside and play now? I've brought my ball so we can play catch!" Kairi says.
    "alright, race 'yall!" Sora says runnjing already.
    Kairi ran after him waving goodbye to the two.
    "hey!" Sharix and Riku say in unison and annoyance, they reach them last.
    "ha! we get to get the first throw!" Sora says.
    "that sin't very fair! You had a headstart!" Sharix argues.
    "that is true," Kairi ays, then walked over to Riku. "I'll team with you instead." she says.
    "alrighty then! Let's start!" Sharix says excitedly.
    They all started to play catch.

    Though something different happened. Suddenly a door of darkness had opened behind Sharix, who had the ball.
    Riku and Kairi had just stared in horror, they we're totally in shock.
    Sharix looked at them questioned. "what? Why are you staring?" Sharix asks.
    Sora hadn't noticed but turned to what they were staring at and he too had to just stop.
    Suddenly darkness grabbed Sharix quickly. "what the-?" she says suprised, "Sora! Kairi! Riku! Help me!" she exclaims, dropping the ball. She started screaming and crying. She tried to break free, but just couldn't.
    Sora snapped out of it, hearing the call for help. He grabbed Sharix's hand trying to pull her away from the darkness.
    Kairi rushed over and grabbed her other free hand.
    Riku rushed in too and tries to hold Kairi and Sora down. The sand didn't help that much either.
    Sharix seemed like she was being swalloed by the darkness, Kairi had accidentaly let go of her hand by accident. Her other hand was still tightly held by Sora.
    "Sharix!" Kairi shouts.
    "help me please!" she shouts back, her voice sounding quite high pitched.
    "I-I can't hold on much longer.." Sora says.
    "Don't worry We're always with you, no matter what!" Kairi says.
    "Exactly our friendship is too strong. Whatever happens won't do anything with our friendship!" Riku says.
    Sharix nodded.
    Sora's mother heard something, then saw something going on. She ran up to all of them.
    Sora's hand had slipped off from Sharix's and she had immediatly disappeared into the darkness.
    Sora had fallen on the ground. And Aunt Vallerie had only come now. "no..no.." she says softly, kneeling beside Sora.
    Sora got up,crying and hugged gis mother. He was sobbing.
    Kairi and Riku had fallen too, but Kairi had no intention of getting up- she was sobbing aswell. Riku tried holding in the tears, but ended up sobbing too.
    "The time has come. Destiny has taken place." Risha's voice rang through Vallerie's head.
    Rain began to fall, the skies got dark.
    "we'll see each other again, right mother?"Sora sobs looking up at her.
    She didn't reply at all, and he didn't have to wait for one.
     
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    Woah! Unexpected twist.... All I have is one measly comment....
    AWSOME!!!!!!!!
     
  13. Dinny I am Anime ( ⚈้̤͡ ◡ ⚈้̤͡ )

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    aww...thankyou so much ^^

    Chapter 6: Memories of The Past
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    Sharix walked around some place. "Sora! Riku! Kairi! Aunt Vallerie! Where are ya?" she calls. She accidentaly bumbed into some guy. She looks up at him scared.
    "get lost kid." he says.
    She remains there speachless.
    "I said get lost!" he shouts.
    She gave out a little squeek and ran off, she walked into some ally and saw some kind of room- well it looked like a room. She walked in not finding anyone in it. She sat down, and started crying.
    "Are you ok?" a voice asks her.
    She looks up, backing away slightly.
    "no, no. I'm not going to hurt you." he says.
    "please help me." she says.
    "alright I'll help you, Name's Tom." he says.
    "I-i'm Sharix," she says and looks up at his periwinkle eyes.He was probably 9, it looked like it.
    "Now, how can I help you?" he asks her.
    "I need to find a way to get back home, Destiny Islands." She says.
    "I'm sorry, I never heard of this place. Can you tell me how you've got here?" he asks.
    she nodded and told him everything.

    "go to sleep Sora." aunt Vallerie said.
    "mom...I can't I have to say goodnight to sharix but she isn't here." he says.
    "she had to go." She said.
    "but why?" Sora said getting up from his bed.
    "it's very complicated for you to understand." she says.
    " I don't care, tell me." Sora says.
    "get to sleep, I'll tell you tomorrow." she says.
    Sora lay back down and closed his eyes, then once he heard a door close he got up again and looked out of the window. Tears filled his eyes. "Sharix..." he says.
    Aunt Vallerie sighed leaning on Sora's door, she slid down to the floor and hugged her knees, crying aswell.
    "please, don't cry." Risha said appearing to her.
    Aunt Vallerie looked up.
    "Please, it's making me sad too. I promise, your sorrow will end soon. I promise." she says then disappeared again.
    Aunt Vallerie looked around, "but how?"


    Well, all for today! I'll be back tomorrow- late unfortunatly. Anyways, yeah hope ya guys have enjoyed my previous chapters! byez!
     
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    awsome darkheart you might get a job as a writer one day lol
     
  15. C This silence is mine

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    Love the newest chapter it's good
     
  16. sora32477 Merlin's Housekeeper

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    That is a really good story you should defiently write more.
     
  17. khmage1918 King's Apprentice

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    And yet again....
    AWSOME!!!!!
     
  18. Kairi9020 Traverse Town Homebody

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    It's really good. *clasps* I like it. You should write more.
     
  19. Quiet Elegy This is the death of beauty.

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    Wow, it's pretty good, normaly I don't like storys with new charecters added but this is interesting, please keep writing.
     
  20. eentje Traverse Town Homebody

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    According to my time, you did this all in one day.
    I like your style!