Kairi tribute: the Ocean

I've been meaning to post here for a while, I'm quite the fan of some of your poetry.

This is very lighthearted and I can see you've used a simile which is a firm start in using poetic devices. Your use of language here is quite backward and entrancing, which I picked up in the lines "and everyplace has a view of the stars not few".

I had to pick out this one because the rhyming here was beautiful. It could have done without the typical, slightly emo reference to blood, though. The final rhyming couplet was wonderful and showed quite an impressive vocabulary.

This felt like a war chant, lovely. xD

The rhyming was also beautiful here, and this poem in particular was quite touching. (:

Some excellent work here- please continue. You should double check your spelling once you've posted, though.

 

Kairi:
My heart,
is waiting for you,
my life,
is waiting for you,
my soul,
is waiting for you,
and yet you are gone!

Gone like the rushing wind!

Gone off to sail the great sea!

Gone with the passing of time!

When will you be mine?

Riku:
All I want,
All I need,
it you,
to set me free,
and yet you are gone!

Gone without me!

Gone to find new freinds!

All you want is to be my end!

Kairi:
Without me,
without him,
all you are is,
just a long-lost sin,
and still you are gone!

Gone in the vastness of space!

Gone while we just wait!

How could I blame him for the trouble you caused?

Riku's forgoten Girlfreind: Forgoten and Gone

Why did I ever?
Why did I even think?
Why did you go away?

You are,
Forgoten and gone!

With the rushing wind!

With the tides of the sea!

With the passing of time!

Why couldn't you have been mine?

Why did I belive,
that you would come back to me?

Why did you, chase after her?
when you knew I was here?

But to you,
I am forgoten and gone!

I am gone, with the Rushing wind,
I am gone, with the tides of the sea,
I am gone, with the passing of time!

And you were never mine.
Because,
to you,
I am,

Forgoten and Gone.

Once, I was an inocent child,
Once I was free,
Once I was running and playing,
but that was the old me,

Now all I do is fight,
Now all I feel is war,
Now all I am is a memory,
A memory of life,

My heart, my thoughts, they betrayed me,
My heart, my thoughts, they lied,
My heart, my thoughts, took me down,
the wrong path,

All I can remember is fear,
All I can feel is pain,
All I can do is cry for mercy,
to the dark void in vain,

My life, it is gone,
My life, it has failed,
My life, it is worth nothing more,
than an old stretch of shore,

I am the looser,
I am the fallen,
I am the last breath,
of my past life,

But now, I am a warrior,
But now, I am free,
But now, he has come for me,
and we are three once more.

 

Verse 1:
oh where did the years go?
it seems just like yesterday,
I was playing on the beach all day.

Chorus:
Time flys,
and you better get used to it,
because it always has,
and it always will.

Verse 2:
Oh where did the years go?
it seemed just like yesterday,
I was running after them, accrossed the sand.

Chorus:
Time flys,
and you better get used to it,
because it always has,
and it always will.

Verse 3:
Oh where did the years go?
it seemed just like yesterday,
that I was with his heart.

Chorus:
Time flys,
and you better get used to it,
because it always has,
and it always will.

Verse 4:
Oh where did the years go?
it seemed just like yesterday,
That he and I were seperated.

Chorus:
Time flys,
and you better get used to it,
because it always has,
and it always will.

Verse 5:
Oh where did the years go?
it seemed just like yesterday,
that I heard that voice again.

Chorus:
Time flys,
and you better get used to it,
because it always has,
and it always will.

Verse 6:
Oh where did the years go?
it seemed just like yesterday,
that it started with an "S"


Chorus:
Time flys,
and you better get used to it,
because it always has,
and it always will.

Verse 7:
Oh where did the years go?
it seemed just like yesterday,
that man came and took me away.

Chorus:
Time flys,
and you better get used to it,
because it always has,
and it always will.

Verse 8:
Oh where did the years go?
it seemed just like yesterday,
That they came to set me free,

Chorus:
Time flys,
and you better get used to it,
because it always has,
and it always will.

Verse 9:
Oh where did the years go?
it seemed just like yesterday,
that we escaped that place,

Chorus:
Time flys,
and you better get used to it,
because it always has,
and it always will.

Verse 10:
Oh where did the years go?
it seemed just like yesterday,
That we finaly parted ways.

Ending:
and now,
where am I?
Just this old wooden house,
thinking of,
years gone by,
as I am worn away,
All of the children say,
I'm getting too old to stay,
but this is my home,
always has been always will be.

Oh the end is near
and I am in tears for you
for you, Sora, for you

oh at my last breath
when I see your face comming
for me finaly

and we will rejoice
because we are together
at last, forevermore​

 

Haven't heard from you in a while :D you have some pretty awsome songs and poems . . . and haikus, you should do more. There it is, loved it !!!

 

A Nobody's hope

Thanks for all the feedback everyone.


My life,
it never was,

My heart,
I never even had it,

My mind,
it is the only thing,

That I am.

Chrorus 1:

All the world says that I,
never should have been,
but I know, I know now,
that I always will be,
one mind, one soul,
as heartless as I appear to be.

Your life,
it never was,

Your heart,
you never even had it,

your mind,
it is the only thing

That you are.

Chorus 2:

All the world says that you,
never should have been,
but I know, I know now,
that you always will be,
one mind, one soul,
as heartless as you appear to be.

Our lives,
they never were,

Our hearts,
we never even had them,

Our minds,
are the only thing,

That we are.

Chorus 3:

All the world says that we,
never should have been,
but I know, I know now,
that we always will be,
one mind, one soul,
as heartless as we appear to be.

 

This song is amazing, and for some reason a tune from disney *I think aladdin* popped into my head, and I am pretty sure it was cause I think it was Jasmine singing :) Not much else to say except . . . There it is, Jasmine sings lovely *why is Jasmine singing a song about nobodies* Keep up the good work!

 

*not Jasmine, Jasmine's nobody!*

I haven't got a Heart
and yet I fe-el some-thing
It must be true love

When you are a-round
I fe-el it in-side me
It must be true love

This warmth, won-der-ful
Is some-thing that I know
It must be true love

I love you so much
Don't ask me how, Nam-i-ne
It must be true love​

 

Nice, I like the simplicity, yet complexity behind this . . . I give it a two-thousand thumbs up. You are a master poet *bows*

Spoiler

There it is, yay for spoilers . . . and 9K9H's poems!!!

 

The chant of maddness

They call us to the feild,
They say we need great valor,
To fight these wretched creatures,
That origanate in the darkness of night.​

So we come with Valor,
So we come with Might,
So we bear our arms,
And chant our chant of madness,​

But it amounts to nothing notheless.​

They call us to the feild,
They say we need to be mighty,
To fight these wretched creatures,
That origanate in the darkness of night.​

So we come with Valor,
So we come with Might,
So we bear our arms,
And chant our chant of madness,​

But it amounts to nothing notheless.​

They call us to the feild,
They say we need our weapons,
To fight these wretched creatures,
That origanate in the darkness of night.​

So we come with Valor,
So we come with Might,
So we bear our arms,
And chant our chant of madness,​

But it amounts to nothing notheless.

They call us to the feild,
They say we must be mad,
To fight these wretched creatures,
That origanate in the darkness of night.

So we come with Valor,
So we come with Might,
So we bear our arms,
And chant our chant of madness,​

But it amounts to nothing notheless.​