Jiku's Right and Proper Poetry Thread

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Jiku Neon, Feb 4, 2010.

  1. Jiku Neon Kingdom Keeper

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    I'm going to see if I can write some right and proper formal poetry. Free form modern era poetry isn't for me I think so this is the best way to try it out. The following is a pitiful excuse for a sonnet.


    Slate Grey Skies

    My mind is likened to a cold blank slate
    By the graceful mourners who pass me by
    Upon me they only look with naught but hate
    Contempt for me and my likeness to fly

    The body in the ground is blank as I
    They see it in me, they see it in him
    If I were them I would not even try
    To overwrite myself with heavy limb

    But they also can fly as well these fools
    Not look up to me in their dreary grief
    For now not bound by mortality's tools
    Accusatory as I were the thief

    The slate is blank and all the sky is grey
    And so it’s not my place for me to stay


    Main focus here was rhyming and rhythm. Subject matter and metaphorical rules will be followed in the future if there is one here. CnC appreciated as always.
     
  2. Jiku Neon Kingdom Keeper

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    Limericks are fun and easy apparently.


    A man by the name of Duquesne
    Would saunter along down the lane
    Till tripped by a broom
    He fell with a boom
    And never did saunter again



    Was told by a man I was lame
    That I couldn't ever gain fame
    Beat the poor bugger
    Like I was a mugger
    And oh yes I forgot "The Game"