Jack and Diane

Discussion in 'Archives' started by JellyBeing, Aug 28, 2009.

  1. JellyBeing ALL. THE. BUTTS.

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    I don't know if this should be considered a poem or a short story... I just needed to write SOMETHING. Take it as you wish and move it as you please.
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    Once upon a time,

    In a land far away

    Jack and Diane used to play

    They’d bask in the warm, sunny weather

    And just chill together

    Wasting away their days

    But you see the boy was a fighter

    And along came spider

    And scared the girl away

    Alas she’d come back

    Stay for awhile

    But always in time for the new attack

    They went up the hill

    And down the hill

    Like a damn roller coaster

    Until it pushed her closer and closer

    In order to mess with his brain

    She first had to learn the game

    Once,

    Twice,

    Thrice times a lady.

    She came back

    Now on her own attack

    To her surprise

    The boy had tears in his eyes

    He was confused

    She felt used

    Never meaning to abuse

    But she lit the fuse

    I guess I lose

    Then she wrote a little ditty about Jack and Diane

    One.

    Two.

    Three strikes.

    I'm out.

    But some say life goes on.
     
  2. Daenerys Targaryen ok

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    I really liked this. Not only was it easy to read,but it wasn't dark and mysterious like some poems I've read. I liked how it's a short story but in a poem form, I enjoyed it. Now write more C:
     
  3. Juicy Chaser

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    Hah, it was amusing to read especially since you threw in random lyrics. Extremely disjointed, I guess you don't enjoy being formal at all.

    Reading it, it almost feels like you're ranting to somebody.