It's these days I fill never forget..

I feel you beside me
You tell me it’s alright
And I believe you

I sigh, and you look me
You nod,
We off to the room again

Another night,
You look down at me
I look away
You say it’s alright
And I believe you

I put my foot down
I don’t want this anymore
You give a grave look

And I run.

I was reading something I can't remember what about child molesters, and I thought of up this.. it's not much but CnC please? :]​

 

I liked it. But I didn't get the "We off to the room again" part. Was it suppose to be "We're"? 0_o

I liked the deep part of the grave look thing.

I don't see what Child Molesters have to do with this though 0_o

9.9/10

 

>__>

I have bad editing skills. xD

It's usually parent's that do this to there kids.
If you think about it, it make perfect sense right?
Thank you!
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it does. It reminds me of what parents used do to me years ago when I was a bad girl. You did a good job.

ps. that wasn't a joke just so you know

 

That's a good poem, but it's very sad. Well done. I felt relieved with the last line, but what happens after she runs? Very well done. 10/10

 

Awesome job. It's very emotional. And yes, what does happen when she runs?

 

I can continue it afterwards?
Ina another poem if you guys want?

:]

 

Sure, I wanna see this continued.

I might just use this in mah Fanfics >3

 

Ahaha, sure thing Zeo.

Sure, that's what I was thinking also!
=DDD

 

This is really good:)
It's strange how such random things can give us inspiration.
10/10

 

This was very well written, Skittles. <3

10/10

 

I ran as fast as my legs would carry me
I saw you dash right behind me
I let out my screech

I hear your feet pound hard on the ground
As hard as my heart beats
I see the door
You run faster

I jump outside, sill screaming
The lights in my house flicker
As of next door

I run into the street
I can’t feel my heart beat

The pain you put me through
I hope it ends here
The end of the street nears
As of you..

I scream my final words in your face,
As I heard the screeches,
Your face looks deadly

As I look at you saddly

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Here's the second part.
it's not as good tho..
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I LOVE IT! <3

I also like the Heart beating and Final Scream too! <3

....Sill? 0_o

10/10

 

Extremely well written. You keep going at this. Does she get away? Get killed? What? If you decide to write another, I can't wait. Great and saddening work.

 

Fine, you can just be my editor or something!

Thank you. ^^

 

This Acually made me tear a bit..^^

SUCH A GOOD POEM..

*100000/10*

 

It's been a few years
But time doesn't change for you
Tick, Tick, Tick

Mom forces me to visit
She doesn't understand..
Bing, Bong, Bing

I don't smile
You fave
I don't care

It's time to go
Tick, Tick, Tick

I'm back in the car
And shards fall from the sky
Click
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Okay this one was alittle shorter, I'm making it so that they'll be more poems to read. :]

I'm going with more, so yeah. Be patient. :]

 

I love this actually. Very emotional and true to the situation; captures the moment very well. It has a sense of foreboding to it at first and then the last part is a bit of releaf after the heavy parts. 10/10 <3

 

Thank you, I've been more of a poet then anything else.
D:

I try my best to really get a image going, and alot's of emtions.
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I'm happy or your guy's support and comments.
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Wow... really nice poem. It's kinda sad, but it's really good. Great job...!