I am so freaking proud of how this turned out. I just love it. Version 1 Version 2: It's not finished, 'cuz I'm going to digitally colour it. Critique, pleeeeease?
Alright, so, the first problem that came out and slapped me int he face were the breasts. How many breasts do you see that face in different direction and have a clearly large gap in between them? >: Also, the anatomy of a woman is all based around babymakin', the hips are wider and farther apart then any man's, meaning that their shoulders should be LESS broad then their hips. You have it the other way around, the hips are skinner then the shoulders. Her head is also rather large and disproportional to the rest of her body. Fix her hands(They look like claws), and make her right arm shorter, it's longer thent he left arm by at least a few inches, which is not normal. If I were you I'd erase the whole upper body and re-do it, actually, that's where you made most of your mistakes.
As Cin pointed out, most of your mistakes are towards the upper body. Her neck also looks a little skinny to match with the head and body. Her arms also are a little to skinny.
That's not necessarily bad, overly skinny characters can be considered a style choice, what's more important is proportion and correct anatomical logic.
Oh, this is sexy. <33 Why does this remind me of Guitar Hero?? O.o' Anyways . . . it's critique time. 8DD Hmm, since you want to color this digitally, I go though this in detail, aaaaaad . . . let's go from top to bottom then . . . [don't hate me if the thingy is really long, love. D'8] I love her expression, that's a first. And all the attributes of the face are really good, and well done, good proportions and face cut ;). Though what I would fix is the length of her nose. Albeit it suits her face, the nose is a little too long, and as a result, your lips are too low on the face, leaving her not enough space for a chin. The error can be fixed really easily, you don't have to do this by hand. Just open it in paint, and use the cut option to move it up just a tad bit. The little bump of the nose is also straying from the bridge of the nose. So move up the bump to the left, to match the bone there and move up as well, and same for the lips, move it up, while keeping her facial proportions. Lastly, I think I see a lip ring, unless I'm just seeing things again. Well, if that does happen to be a lip piercing, her ring is out of perspective. Draw the ring -over- the lip as the semi circle, from your perspective . . . meaning, draw it as you are looking at her. Once you color her lips and jewelry, the ring will be very visible, so don't worry about whether if you'll be able to see it or not. I love the flow of her hair. <3 But she needs just a tad bit of volume on the right side of her face. =] Just make that arc a bit rounder than the current one. Her neck is fine, and it's not long in reality. What's giving the neck its long illusion is the fact that you've forgotten to put a straight line on the neck to indicate a certain muscle [the sternocleidomastoid] O_O Er, right . . . well, turn your head to the side, tighten your neck muscle and feel the muscle that's extending upward from the collarbone. That's what you're missing. So just add that in, using yourself as the subject and reference. With that, the neck would not look so long. Also, move the collarbones up, they are too low on the chest. The sternocleidomastoid should connect with the collarbone, so they need to be a little higher. This is another reason the neck looks long. Ok, I know Cin said to narrow her shoulders, and I'm not sure if you did so, but your shoulders are too small. If you're wondering what the length of the shoulders should be, then again, use your own body's anatomy to understand the proportions. The shoulders should be extended just the bit to match her posture, and perspective. I'd not worry much about the other shoulder, as it's covered by her lovely hair. But if possible, I'd make some of that hair fall behind her shoulders. It's look good, and realistic. Just take a tiny strand and part the hair. Now. Her arms are really our of proportion, love. Though it's mostly her left arm. The upper arm is too long compared to the lower arm. Then her hands are too small. The hand should be able to cover half of her face. Even though you cannot see her hand because it's hidden behind her head, you could still tell that her hand is too small. You should reduce the length of her upper arm, and the lower arm should come meet it in a much slanted manner, if you get what I mean. Now, in contrast to her left hand, her right hand seems fine, proportion wise, but again, her hands are too small. The fingers are fine, it's the palm that gives it the small hand feeling. So if you fix that, it'd be good. Alright, boobs . . . they be hanging. And, well, she obviously is not wearing a bra, but the way you drew them, it makes it look like her shirt is made from pure spandex material, and it's hugging EVERY curve of her body [which can be a good thing, but it messes up the boobies]. Boobs would be fine if you only take the extended line off the left boob, and turn that into a shadow, to merely indicate the roundness of the breast then to actually show that it -is- the breast. The second boob is fine, but considering her chest is, it's still sort of pointing the other way. Make that one rounder, by adding a small arc to the chest itself. Once you add that, you should be able to follow the perspective of the other boob match them to make them face the same way. The curve of her lumber portion is excellent, as I also see that you indicted the rib cage by adding a small bump immediately under her breast. She's got one sexy figure, as it curves and meets the hip. Now, I must say that the transition from lumber to pelvic is exceptional, SO SMOOTH!! <3 The perspective is amazing in this area. However, the left side of the hip needs to be emphasized in order to actually present her body. The arc of her back is fine, but add a little fold to where that arc meets the hip, and slightly curve the hip to indicate her glutes. 8D She needs at least -some- indication of buttocks. ;) From there on, everything else is fine. I wish you good luck in coloring this piccy. And of course, put it up once it's finished. I'll be looking forward to it. And I swear that I won't post any thing that's longer than a small paragraph! >_< Keep it up! You are improving at a great speed. <333 Btw, I critiqued the piccy on the 5th post, in case you were wondering.
