I stood there with you,wind through my hair..water in my eyes. I stood there with you,my hands cold,not in yours. I stood there with you,heartache eating up my soul. I stood there with you,as you walked toward me to say,something secret. I stood there with you,as you looked sympathetic into my eyes. I stood there,then you were gone. I cried there,once you left. I waited there,for you to say sorry..You never came. I left there,broken and confused. How could she ever measure up to how much I loved you,how was she better? I stood there,alone.
Ranging in emotions, descriptive, interesting, I like....xD It's good. You're good at this type of stuff. Keep it up. <3
This is the first piece I've read by you. I really like it too. It has a nice flow to it and you described the emotions very nicely. And usually I don't like redundant lines, but you made it work really well. Great job :3
