I pray for everbody. I pray for some day the war will end, and everybody will be happy. I pray for Japan. I pray for all kids with no food; with no water. I pray for everybody. There's so much war going on and for nothing. God gave us life, we can't fight. So lets stop fighting, for a better day, for a better world. For a better life. Hope you like. Anything I didn't spell right, tell me and I'll fix it :type:
Well, remember that when starting a sentence you use capital letters. You leave a space after a period. Also, this structure doesn't really show any flow or anything, you may want to start out with a more default structure. Keep it up.
I don't mean to go all poetic wise person here but... Prayers don't need to flow, they just need to be from the heart. ALWAYS REMEMBER: You're writing for God, not anyone else. Don't be afraid to mess up, he's cool with it.
Of course, if you're implying it's a prayer. I'm going on the default basis that it's a poem about prayer. And of course there's free-form poetry, too. I'm just saying that maybe using a stanza structure could help.
Oh I know, but I'm telling her that she shouldn't want any kind of revision for her prayers with the "I hope you like it" you know? Yes.
I agree with you both. It works very well as a prayer, not so much as a poem. If it was meant to be the latter, I suggest following Chev's advice. He's in the know.
