I Must Leave Now

I've enjoyed our time together so far
and I wish we could stay together forever
but I'm afraid it is time I depart
for the sun has gone down
and it is time for bed

I wish I could stay with you forever
every second of the day
in your arms
just being loved
and cared for

But I'm afraid that cannot happen
for each day I must leave
as the sky grows dark
and my need for sleep rises

Even though I must leave you
I will say this
I will be back tomorrow
and then we may hug yet again
and love just as we did
the day before
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a quick little good night poem... XD XD

 

Lol the more poems the more expierence....good length....good free verse....awesome how these just come to you fairly quickly.....and good atmosphere.......keep up the good work Destiny....

 

lol thanks ^^ i dunno how but they just pop into my head and I write them down really quickly... >.<

 

you just keep getting better and better

 

Thanks! :glomp: XD XD

 

Very nice. The only thing I think would look better changed is 'sleepiness' at the end of the third paragraph to 'need for sleep' (but that's just me; it still looks great). Keep up the good work.

 

Hmm...I think you accidentally misspelled 'tomorrow' but otherwise...great job, this is awesome work. :)

 

thanks! I changed it... so it should be a bit better now... >.< and I couldn't think of anything for sleepiness at the time... lol...

 

Good job.

I like the idea for a poem about going to bed.

You did it well, it's not something that many could do.

Two thumbs up + some rep for you!
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Is a little short for a quick one, probably because I can write something larger in 5 minutes XD, but very good.