i hate being alone

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Scarred Nobody, Aug 24, 2008.

  1. Scarred Nobody Where is the justice?

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    a really short poem i wrote...

    Sitting alone in a room
    no one to hold.
    My arms grow weak in
    the darkness
    I hate being alone.

    Seeing people together
    a tear goes down my cheek,
    wishing for a special moment
    i hate being alone.

    I can see her in the darkness
    she's near, and yet so far.
    I wanna make that dream a reality
    I hate being alone!

    seriously, i hate being single.
     
  2. Juicy Chaser

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    I liked it.
    The repitition at the end of each stanza was quite effective
    kind of made me sad reading it though..
    I hate being single too ehehe
     
  3. Pure Beats~ Chaser

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    Eh, I'm all right with being single.

    Now, onto the poem.
    It was very good, and I enjoyed reading it. It hada nice flow to it.
    Like the user above me said, the repition of "I hate being alone" was very effective.

    Good job. ^-^