Haiku help

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  1. Fayt-Harkwind Where yo curly mustache at?

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    I'm looking for a basic guideline for making a Haiku since I had a go but it doesn't seem right to me.
     
  2. In_the_Twilight Twilight Town Denizen

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    Three lines, 5, 7, 5 syllables (total of 17), unrhyming. Here's one I wrote in Grade 12. Not super awesome, but its an example:

    Dawn at Sea

    The crisp morning light
    Clashing with the salty breeze
    Colours all array
     
  3. Fayt-Harkwind Where yo curly mustache at?

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    Thanks, heres the one I attempted

    A light from the moon
    A wolf would sit upon the mountain
    The sound of a howl


    I don't think I got the context right
     
  4. Azure Flame Banned

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    You did it wrong. It's syllabals, not words.

    Here is a more Haikuish version I came up with of yours.

    A light from the moon
    A wolf sits on the mountain
    Sounds of a howl

    As you can see, I just changed it a little to give it the 5, 7, 5 syllabal count.
     
  5. Fayt-Harkwind Where yo curly mustache at?

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    Ok I think I understand it now i'll come up with something later
     
  6. Xaale Sylph of Hope

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    An example of a haiku would be

    Lamenting phoenix
    of incarnadine color
    sings woes mixed with joys.


    It has to be 5, 7, 5 syllable wise.

    "La-ment-ing-phoe-nix" Is five syllables, for line one.
    "Of-in-car-na-ding-co-lor" is seven syllables, for line two.
    "Sings-woes-mixed-with-joys" is five syllables once again for the last line.

    There are always three lines in a haiku. No more, no less. The structure of 5/7/5 never changes as well.

    What you want to do is do the best word combination possible and sound poetic. "Incarnadine" is another word for red. It fits well in there. If it was red, for one, it would not have enough syllables. Red would be stuck in there like "With feathers colored bright red" or something, which still works and sounds poetic, but does it really fit?

    That's for you to decide. Personally, I think it would fit finely, but I prefer incarnadine color.
     
  7. The Fuk? Dead

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    It's funny how changing a couple of words can change a poem so much.
     
  8. Fellangel Bichael May

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    O yea. I agree. It can even insult some people. Not like I ever tried that before D8
     
  9. Azure Flame Banned

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    I was just using his own creation as an example. If I offended him, I appologize, it wasn't my intent. It was just an example.
     
  10. Fayt-Harkwind Where yo curly mustache at?

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    Don't worry Azure you haven't offened me