This is due on Wednesday and its the rough draft and I want personal opinions on it. Its an assignment for my Honors English class and it has to answer five questions in any kind of poem I chose. -Where do you see yourself in seven years? Descibe. -What are you doing with your life? 9-5 work time? -What is the biggest physical change/what will people notice about you in seven years? -Whats your general attitude towards life in seven years? -What do you miss most about highschool? EDIT-We also had to write in third person... ---------------------------------------------- Going back into highschool, you wouldn't notice the average looking girl, the one just sitting. She usually just sat in class, not always paying full attention; mostly in her thoughts. Fast forward to now; shes standing, pacing around a small office, unlike in a classroom. Focusing on her client, complete concentration, listening and analyzing every word, trying to decipher problems. It seems so absurd to think that she would help people. How did this happen? Now she looks polished and important, a professional look to her. It is absolutely amazing. And her mood is so relaxed. Seemingly just like old times. Almost like nothing changed. Judging a book by its cover. Its what people always do, almost like its automatic. She must have her own problems, focusing on clients all day must leave her isolated. Not being able to talk frequently, she must be rather lonely. Was this by choice? How is she able to withstand being completely busy all day? Its ridiculous to think, she has changed. ~Feedback is needed and appriciated.
That was great. I liked it a lot. I agree with Tora-chan, it's a nice touch by writing in third person. It's very nice. Good job. ^_^ Edit: Now I saw the new post. You did very well writing in third person.
