Hey KHV! Havent been here in while... Now this poem is very...everywhere. Some verses have a set rhythm, others don't. None rhyme. Its very disjointed but I think in a thought process like this, it works. Lemme know what you think =) No! I said I screamed I screeched My vow to myself Heart failure was there Rising Climbing Peaking as it cracked Thats when I swore Promised Crossed my heart It will never break Then there was you Your eyes Your hair Your smile Your...everything Nothing about you whispered 'perfection' No, everything about you screamed it. No! I said I screamed I screeched My vow to myself But you were worth it The effort The pain The tears The shame Well, my thoughts were the only ones that mattered Oops. There was you Kissing the icing of a cakeface Uncovering the wretched beauty that lay beneath Then there was me Cold Alone Broken No where near as much as you'll be And I swore again No one is worth it No one should hurt The way that I did But you follow your logic That follows your emotion That follows your heart So when you follow the leader You're back at the start.
I really like this~ Noone ever said a poem has to rhyme or has to have a rhythm :) Sometimes the best poems are written free-verse :) But this poem is lovely...It's kind of sad though..But I do like it a lot ^_^ that last verse really gets me (And kind of rhymes..Heart, start) The way it suggests following your heart gets you nowhere...A very strong poem indeed...Well done ^_^ It's masterpiece~
