First kiss...

It was like a dream come true
when i first kissed you.
Your lips pressed against mine
and mine against yours.

I felt like I was floating
high above the clouds
with you in my arms
I felt so happy

You held me close
as if you had known me for years
but we only met
just a few days ago.

when our kiss finally broke
you smiled at me
and grabbed me
in a gentle embrace

you told me you loved me
and I smiled at you
but now I ask myself
should I have trusted you?

 

Wow...that was beautiful...really entrancing...awesome job. :) Oh, but around several of the last verses, you forgot to capitalize the 'I'...but anyway, great job. :)

 

eep i always do some spelling wrong... >.<

was it really that beautiful...? maybe i will show these to my writing teacher... O.o

 

it was gawjuzz

 

ROMANTIC! XD lol it was awesome :woohoo:

 

thanks, guys! ^.^

 

it was really good

 

Very romantic , :D , I love this . :D

 

I like the poem but wasn't expecting the last line!!! good job!! I like when writers can add just a simple twist to their poems that it can change the ENTIRE poem

 

Very good ^^, and is the first time you don´t rip the theme from me :P.

 

lol... I luv to make sudden twists at the end of poems... but it's difficult to do sometimes... >.<

yayz! lol... thanks! :P

 

OMG that was so good.

Did you recently have your first kiss or something? This is amazing.

Yes, the twist at the end pwns as well.

Great job.
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No... I didn't... I don't remember ever kissing anybody at all... >.< this is what I imagine it would be like... glad you liked it! ^^

 

Good length....good free verse....good atmosphere and good mood.....liked the twist at the end....although I still hope it turns out happy lol.....good job Destiny....

 

I suppose it turns out happy... >.< lol ^^ Glad you liked it ;P

 

The first line of the poem got me intrested real quickly, and the poem was really romantic u did a great job!!!!!!!

 

This was really romantic and awesome. I liked it. :) Now I can't wait for my first kiss...

 

*clap clap* it's beautiful...it's absolutely beautiful...