Falling....is that what's happening to me? I feel....not like myself. Where am I? Who am I?....What's happening?!?! Axel openned his bright green eyes and blinked. The lights shining around him were very bright, and he was blinded at first. He did not recognize where he was, and his spine ran cold as he looked at his hands. The scars that were on them were not there. Wait, what scars? When did I have scars? Axel put his hand under his chin and pondered. What had happened to him? Why were his scars gone? He then reminded himself that he never had any scars. This was very strange. Axel turned his head, crimson hair making a bristling noise. He reached his hand to his hair but then he yelped as he felt spikes along the top of his head. He never had spikes! He always had a slight mohawk. Wait, what mohawk? Axel put his hands on his ears, all of a sudden hearing voices. "Lea, you are a dead man." He heard his own voice reply with confidencde, "I am not going down wihtout a fight!" Axel titlted his head. Who was Lea? Am I Lea? I think so. Axel grunted in confusion, deep in thought. What was wrong with the picture? He knew that his hair was never spiky. He knew he had scars on his hands. But yet....he felt as if that was a whole other person. Suddenly, a voice called, "It is a whole other person." Axel leaped to his feet, looking around the bright room. For the first time he examined his surrondings. He was in a white chamber with walls as tall as the largest trees. The floor beneath him had a symbol of a splintered heart. Axel yelled to the unknown voice, "Who are you?! Who am I?" There was a pause. Axel continued to look for the source of the voice. Then the voice stated, "You are Axel. You have an other named Lea. You just became a nobody." "A nobody...? What's that?" Axel turned his head to look at the ceiling. Still, there was no one. The voice laughed. "Nobodies are people without hearts. They can not feel emotion...no regret, can they show." Axel put a hand to his chest. The mysterious voice was right. He had no heartbeat. "Okay, fine! I have no heart! You still never answered my other question! Who are you?" Suddenly, a black pool appeared on the floor. Small antena poked through the dark, swishing matter, which was soon followed by a large round head and bright yellow eyes. Axel took a step back before putting his hands over his ears again. He saw the smae creature standing before him, latched onto his chest. Digging his claws into his flesh. Removing his heart. My heart! Axel roared in fury. The little shadow ant, or whatever it was, had taken his heart. This confusion and pain he was suffering now was all that creatures fault. Axel lifted his hands, two disks with spikes coming out of the edges in his grip. Since when did I have chakrams? Axel shook the question off and danced around the creature. He leaped above the creature and did a slight pivot, releasing the chakram down onto the creature. Flames errupted all over the room, the creature fading away. "Yes. Let your anger grow." Axel spun around to find th voice. It was different from the first one. Another pool appeared on the wall, and Axel readied his weapons. Instead of another creature, a man stepped through the portal. He had long black dreadlocks and obsidion colored tatoos on his face. He wore a black cloak with long chains down the neck. He reached a hand out to Axel, the chains clicking against his massive torso. "I am Xaldin. There is nothing to fear about me. The man who was talking to you before was our boss. He is busy and will meet with you later." "Our boss? Since when did I have a boss?" Axel tlitled his head, keeping his emerald eyes fixed on his deep violet ones. Xalding smiled. "It will all be revealed by our boss. He is right this way." Xaldin revealed a hidden door and walked out. Axel hesitated before following him out the door.
Good start, but there is a large number of grammar and spelling mistakes, make sure that you double check spell check.
That was great opening! What Destined said was true of some grammar, but I knew what you were talking about:) This is very good, I'm looking forward:)
Yeah, I can see many grammar errors, too. Lol, I'm going to write it on Microsoft Word this time. Oh, and you can expect chapters to appear on Sundays, Tuesdays, Saturdays, and Sundays. I will soon set a certain day where I will write the chapter, the most possible day being Tuesday. Axel twiddled his thumbs as he waited outside of the Superior’s room. He lifted his green eyes once again to see a person walking through the hallways of the Castle. He sighed as he watched the large, orange haired man walk past him. Another newcomer sat next to Axel. He stared at the white floor, singing a song to himself. Axel tried to pick out the tune and the words the young, mullet haired man was singing but it was unrecognizable. Axel opened his mouth to ask him, but he thought better of it. The young man next to him seemed to notice, though, because he lifted his head and fixed his cobalt eyes on Axel. Axel blinked away, but mullet boy grinned and said, “Hey, there’s nothing to worry about! I won’t bite or drench you with water!†Axel slowly turned his head to fix his gaze on the beaming person. Axel ventured, “You can summon water, just as I can summon fire?†The man nodded, adding, “By the way, my name is Demyx.†“Mine is Axel.†Axel managed a smile, but his lips faltered and they returned to a frown. Demyx put a hand on his shoulder, and said, “Don’t worry about it! I’m sure Xemnas won’t try to kill you. He is supposedly a very fair man.†Axel laughed at that statement, and laughing actually made him feel better. Right then, though, the feeling vanished as Xemnas stepped into the hall. He called for Axel to enter the room. Axel looked at Demyx, who gave a thumbs-up sign. At this, Xemnas scowled and walked inside. Axel hurried to follow him. “So, Axel, how long have you been a nobody?†Axel bit is lip, trying to remember. Was it yesterday? Today? A year ago? Xemnas looked up from his notepad and laughed. “You are not sure? Okay, I will tell you then. You have been a nobody for four and a half days. You were in a daze when the summoned heartless took your heart.†Axel asked slowly, “Who summoned this Heartless?†Xemnas started to grin. It was so unpleasant to Axel, and he felt a chill slowly run up his back. Xemnas said, “It was us, the Organization XIII.†Axel felt anger course through him. Weren’t nobodies not supposed to have emotion? Maybe just regret wasn’t felt. Axel bit back a retort from his anger. Instead, he managed to say, “Why did you try to kill me?†Xemnas’ smile grew. “We saw great power in you, Lea. We knew you would change the Organization XIII forever. We do not feel regret. Why would we care if you were killed to become Axel, Number Eight: The Flurry of Dancing Flames?†“Dancing….Flames?†Axel raised his eyebrows. Xemnas explained how each member had their own title. Axel nodded, trying to take everything in with understanding. All of his questions were answered, and three hours later he found himself standing next to Demyx in the main room. They were going to be accepted into the Organization.
Oh, lol. You're right. Here's the next chapter! Axel and Demyx stood below the circles of chairs, tilting their heads back to see their new Superior. He was talking for a while now, and Axel could not lose interest. Xemnas’ voice had some kind of enchantment to it, even if it was deep and droning. At the end of the speech, he gestured to the two nobodies and stated, “I welcome you, Axel: Fury of Dancing Flames, as number eight in the Organization. Also, I welcome you, Demyx: Melodious Nocturne, as number nine in the Organization.†Demyx turned his head and beamed at Axel. Axel couldn’t help but grin back at the mullet haired boy. Axel knew that he shouldn’t have emotions. All he knew right now was that he did have an emotion. That emotion was joy. After a year of working in the Organization XIII, Axel had grown tough and unafraid. He was very skilled at using his chakrams then, and he had been chosen for quite a few special missions. Poor Demyx, however, still had little respect by his other members. He was considered naïve by most of the other members, and he was rarely chosen to help with missions. Axel walked through the hallways and turned a left. He came to Demyx’s room. Knocking softly, he heard a dark response snap, “Go away!†Axel whispered softly, “No, Demyx, it’s me. I came to see how you were feeling.†After a few moments, Axel heard the click of the lock and watched the door open. Demyx stood in the doorway, a half smile on his face. “What’s wrong, Dem?†Axel instantly knew what had happened before the Melodious Nocturne opened his mouth. It was obvious that he had failed one of his only missions again. Axel didn’t want the boy to now, though, because Demyx would probably be angry that it was obvious he failed. “And then I was struck down by that three headed, mangy mutt!†He grunted at the end of his tale about his failure in Olympus Coliseum, and how his plan to defeat the beast Cerberus to weaken the God of the Underworld’s power. Hades was growing too strong, and his right hand minion was Cerberus. Axel asked, “Who is going to try the mission instead?†Demyx pointed to himself. Axel breathed, “You? Even after you failed?†Demyx nodded. He explained that Xemnas told him when he got more experience, he could go back and complete his mission. Instead next time, it would be against someone called a Keyblade Master. Demyx had asked who but Xemnas didn’t know. He only knew that one would be born soon. “And he said if Hades overthrew the Organization because of my failure, then I would be the fault of it all!†Axel whistled slowly. That would be bad. When Axel was about to reply to Demyx, he heard a knock on the door. Zexion entered without a response and stated in a matter-of-fact tone, “Axel, you and Demyx are to go on a mission with Xigbar.†Axel flashed his green eyes at Demyx, whose face was in shock. “So quickly after I failed?†Zexion nodded. You two will depart tomorrow. First you must see the Superior, okay?
