Fairytale

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  1. Devil's Angel Gummi Ship Junkie

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    ~My blood flows like magic~
    Your smile is like a rainbow
    Protect me forever
    Love me til' the day you die
    This is so tragic

    I held on
    You let go
    My heart beat slower
    My smile faded
    The nights got colder

    I listen to your cries
    Everything was a lie
    The puzzle piece didn't fit
    I thought you were my prince
    This is our last goodbye

    We laughed and screamed
    Our bond was broken
    Our hearts shaken
    You pushed me away
    Don't forget

    Our love was magical
    Our laughs were music
    Your smile was gold
    Our kiss was sweet
    Our hands were warm

    You were my knight
    Time struck midnight

    The story was lost
    ~This was suppose to be a fairytale~


    A poem I made for my friends.We're all havin' love problems.There is still magic in that smile ^^

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  2. Heaven's Angel Kingdom Keeper

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    awwww... it's wonderful :3

    a few grammatical errors, though... XP til should be spelled: till'
    It should be "My heart beat slower" instead ^^
    "This is our last goodbyes" should probably be either "This is our last goodybye" or "These are our last goodbyes"


    other than that I loved it ^^ :glomp: XD
     
  3. Devil's Angel Gummi Ship Junkie

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    lol sry bout that im like half asleep lol and thanks
     
  4. JapAnimeFanatic Twilight Town Denizen

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    i really really love it ^^
     
  5. Devil's Angel Gummi Ship Junkie

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    TANKS YOU! well this is dedicated to you guys ^^
     
  6. khmage1918 King's Apprentice

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    *stares at this beautiful poem, speechless*
     
  7. Devil's Angel Gummi Ship Junkie

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    *stares with you* *waves hand in front of face* yes? lol is it good or freakin horrible?
     
  8. khmage1918 King's Apprentice

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    It's Just F-cking Awsome!!!
     
  9. Devil's Angel Gummi Ship Junkie

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    thanks at first i thought it was bad :sweatdrop: i always doubt myself ^^