Demon Slayer chapter 1!

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Azure Flame, Apr 8, 2007.

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Should I continue with the story?

  1. Yes, it was very good!

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  2. No, it stunk worse than my gym socks!

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  1. Azure Flame Banned

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    This is the first story I've written. It is completly made by me, characters and all!
    Here we go!

    Demon Slayer chapter 1

    AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!!!!
    Kyle awoke with a start. "That was the most realistic nightmare I've ever had" he thought. Kyle was 17 years old, had short blonde hair and light blue eyes. He got up, put on his glasses, and looked at the time; 7:50 am. "Oh no! I'm gonna be late for school!" he said, putting on his school uniform as quickly as he could. He grabbed some toast for breakfast and headed out.
    On the way to school he ran into his girlfriend Komimi. "School's closed today" she said. Komimi was also 17, had long red hair and light blue eyes and was wearing her school uniform. Kyle said "Closed!? Why?" "Apparently one of the pipes burst and now the school is flooded." "Hmm. That's odd." "Not really. So, where are you gonna go now?" "I guess I'll go to the library then."

    ~Later at the library~

    "What are you doing Kyle?" asked Komimi. "I'm creating some video game characters for one of my classes" Kyle replied. "That's neat! Can I watch?" she asked. "Of coarse you can!" he answered. Suddenly, a bolt of lightning hit the library! The energy from the lightning made the computer Kyle was working on expload!!
    Kyle sat up, dazed and confused. A tall figure stood where the computer once was. His hair was blonde and spikey. His eyes were red with black slits for pupils. He wore a long black overcoat, long black pants, black boots, and had big black bat wings. "Cloudroth" whispered Kyle.
    Cloudroth drew his katana, which was hidden in his overcoat, and lunged for Komimi! Kyle saw this and ran to protect her. Komimi closed her eyes and waited for the pain. But when she didn't feel any pain, she opened her eyes and saw Kyle standing in front of her with Cloudroth's sword sticking out of his back! Kyle turned to look at her and whispered two words; "Komimi. Run!" She nodded and ran off as Cloudroth pulled his sword out of Kyle and flew out an open window. The last thing Kyle saw before he passed out was Komimi running away.

    END OF CHAPTER 1



    Well, what did you think? Should I continue?
     
  2. twilightsora13 Destiny Islands Resident

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    *holds up little sign that says "continue"* the sign is my spokesperson. o_o

    I'm a supporter of people who are just starting to write fanfics and such. ^_^ I was there once, too, and it was tough stuff getting started. o__O good luck and great first job! *thumbs up* you've got an interesting story going here.
     
  3. xValorxSorax Twilight Town Denizen

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    Yes, I think you should. It was good ^_^
     
  4. FPS Steve Merlin's Housekeeper

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    yeah, you should definentely continue. my friends and I always used to write stories and comics about us being demon slayers. and this just brings the memories back. thanks a lot
     
  5. Daenerys Targaryen ok

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    It is good,but is that really your name and is that what you ook like i wouldn't do that if i were you...It was great tho!
     
  6. Azure Flame Banned

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    Thanks for your comments everyone! I'm gonna start on the next chapter as soon as I am done with this post! :D
     
  7. venster You never heard of me, but I pop in time to time

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    Oh my...O_O Already action in the first chappie. >D Awesome!
     
  8. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    Please continue writing. This is very good.
     
  9. kairigirl22 Destiny Islands Resident

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    Ahhh now I see where you go the idea for Champions guild vs. Dark guild.