Prolog You have only one life to live Hehe But what happens when what you want Becomes what you are Chapter 1 College BelleI walked into the classroom with Edward and Alice wondering when this would be over and I could get home to Renesmee. I missed her a lot but Edward had insisted that we had to at least come the first day he had done college once and told me it would be at the least different. We took our seats and I smelled all the humans around me …..Until I got to the boy in front of me I sniffed him and he smelled...well not human definitely blood but it wasn’t human smelling it smelled like a cross between human and animal but not like with Jacob it was somewhat neutral it didn’t burn my throat but it smelled good all the same. “Do you smell him?†I asked Edward quietly enough that no one heard “Yeah weird vie never smelled anything like him†he replied “He isn’t a werewolf cause I can still see him†said Alice “Then what is he?†I asked I leaned forward to see what he was doing and saw him drawing in a sketch book, he was drawing what looked like manga but is was a single scene. In the scene there stood a boy with long spiky hair with a strong build. He wore a shirt with the left sleeve ripped off and the right one short, on his right hand there was a (strangely) bandana around it, on the left arm were bandages going all the way down it, his hands were claws and his face …….it was so weird it was like looking at someone real yea it was a cartoon but it was so weird it had a cocky grin on it and on the right eye was a long scar stretching from his forehead down to his mouth. And the eyes were slits. “Can I help you?†said a voice I jumped a little the boy had noticed my looking with out moving. “Um no I just was looking†I said quickly. He turned and faced me his eyes were not angry but curious he closed his sketch book as the teacher walked in and I notice something strange. The boy had a bandana around his right hand just like the one in his drawing.
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Not bad, but the sentences run on and you need to edit your sentences alot more with spelling and grammar. It was hard to read, but I want to hear more.Work on it.
Chapter2 Edward And I thought we were different Okay so this boy (whose name we found out was Brandon Wyvern) he didn’t bug me so much as the fact that (even though I didn’t say it) he was blocking me. I mean I could feel his mind but couldn’t read it then half way through class I heard him think. “you know its really rude to read someones mind†And then I stopped trying Later when we got home we were walking up and renesmee came running out with jacob behind her (yea he followed us and yes I bugged the heck out of me) and that I didn’t mind so much as the fact that. “hey edward seth whats to let you know that he is sorry bout the car†said jacob My eye began to twitch I mean I really liked seth (his sister leah not so much) but the fact that he followed jacob and had wreaked- “which car?†“the cobra†he answered -my cobra really ticked my off. “im gonna go vent be back later†I said I turned and ran into the forest smelling around for something to drink I was veagly aware of bella behind me when I smell something strange. I landed on a tree branch and turned to bella “that smells like†she said I knodded it smelled like that guy brandon but………it was different somehow We headed towards it and came to a cliff wall that looked like a rock slide had just happened. And there we saw him. It was the guy that brandon had been drawing but in full color ……….and he was beating the crap out of the stone …….was he smiling?!?! He then paused and turned to us grinning then glowed red as the energy(it’s the only thing I can think of to describe it) flowed into his right hand. And there stood Brndon wyvern. “hey ed, bella whats up.†To be continued
Okay, in this one, you've got some misspellings and grammar issues. Re-read your story before you post it. That's what I do.
