Circle Of Life

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  1. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    Ok i was in English today and i got bored so i decided to write a poem hope you like it and enjoy.
    NOTE: I really never write poems so if it sucks i don't care.


    Standing in this circle.
    With all my life.
    With my faith.
    With my surrender.
    I'm all alone.


    No one with me.
    No one at all.
    No one can hear me cry.
    No one can notice me.
    I'm hurt inside.


    No one cares.
    That's how it is.
    When your life is a lie.
    And you wish you just die.
    When your hurt.
    It doesn't matter.


    When you feel sad.
    How do you cheer up?
    Listen to the ocean?
    What if the ocean was angry?
    And the waves roar.


    Hitting against a tree.
    Making it cry.
    Do you feel sad?
    A little boy rides by.
    And he says ''Hi"



    What do you do?
    Get mad and tell him to go away?
    Or be nice and says "Hi" back?
    What if it was me?
    Then what would you do?



    When you get mad.
    Do you stomp and kick?
    Or throw a fit?
    Or just try to calm down?
    You don't know
    Niether do I.



    This is life.
    You gotta deal with.
    Wish you can always be happy.
    So do I.
    But that's the Circle Of Life.




    Thank you for reading
     
  2. Nymph of Destiny Chaser

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    I like it, and it's not that short. I've seen shorter poems before (I even wrote shorter poems before lol). The only thing is you spelled 'neither' wrong at the end, but otherwise, great job. It's a very nice free verse poem!
     
  3. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    heh thanx lol
     
  4. Kairi9020 Traverse Town Homebody

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    That's a really good poem.
     
  5. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    thanx like i said that is my first poem i got bored in english so i rote it lol
     
  6. Shuhbooty moon child

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    Great job. I like the poem. Gets right ot the point, and has feeling.
     
  7. C This silence is mine

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    It's a really nice poem good work
     
  8. Luka Deafening silence

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    Nice poem =D good work ^^