Beginning Of a Heartless-Prolog & Chapter 1

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  1. Rosey Chaser

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    I dunno *scratchs head* im confuzed too.......
     
  2. JellyBeing ALL. THE. BUTTS.

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    Well... in my story in like ch.2 Sora says something like that about clouds... ::scratches head:: More irony I think.... haha :D
     
  3. Rosey Chaser

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    I just like clouds. I mean they are purty......... o and i remember readin that part. I was just confuzzled ( like i always am.........)
     
  4. JellyBeing ALL. THE. BUTTS.

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    Don't mind me I'm random... remind me of my story... prob cause I'm trying to think of some ideas for ch.6 haha... well I do have an idea...
     
  5. Rosey Chaser

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    Im trying to think what you could do... I have an idea.... sorta of an undeveloped idea but an idea............ message me if you want to hear it
     
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    Beginning Of a Heartless-Chapter 4

    Im sorry it took so long....... Its not one of my better chapters...... But please post so you can tell me what to do better!

    Other Chapter:
    Chapter 1 & Prolog:http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?t=10259
    Chapter 2-http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?t=10318
    Chatpter 3-http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?t=10342


    I locked myself in my room and lay down on the bed. I stared at the ceiling, trying to get the pictures of Sora and Riku out of my head, and most importantly trying to get the annoying picture of Aura our. A knock rapped on the door. One time fast, one time slow, Two times fast. It was Sora. "GO AWAY!"
    "But Kairi, " Sora said softly, "We need to talk to you."
    "Well I don’t want to here it," I snapped back. Their footsteps faded as they walked down the stairs. I looked out the window and watched them leave. Sora's head limped down, his hair didn’t seems so spiky. Riku's feet were dragging behind him. I almost felt bad for them. I almost wanted to run out and hug Sora and tell him everything was going to be okay. I sighed and looked out the window. Same picture. I blinked. Now Aura was stand in-between them. Wait! When had that happened? I rubbed my eyes. Nope, she was there. Her eyes looked up to my window. Though the glass, we made eye contact and a pain impaled my chest like a dagger, right where my heart was. She winkled at me and turned to Sora. Her mouth moved and she leaned down, put her hands softly on the back of his neck and embraced him, kissing him on the lips. She drew back and looked at me with a satisfied smile. My faced wrinkled, Riku was as mad as I was. Sora’s hair sprang up, his eyes were dazed, a foggy blue. My hand curled into a fist, my nails impaling my hands. I pounced off my bed and stomped down the stairs. I’ve noticed something, whenever I get REALLY mad, my eyes turn as red as blood. It had only happened once before, when I was pissed off yesterday. I walked out of the house and slammed the door behind me. Riku turned around abruptly, Aura hesitantly turned around and crossed her arms, and Sora was to dazed to know what was happening. I scream at the top of my lungs, “SORA! RIKU! WE NEED TO TALK! NOW!†My eyes burned with fury. Aura strutted to me, we brushed shoulders and she stopped so she was standing next to me, facing the opposite direction I was.
    “Afraid of a little competition Kairi? Only if you had told him…†She flicked her hair and walked away. My hands were shaking madly, and threw my hand out to the side. My keyblade appeared, but instead of being pink and yellow, It was black and red. The daisy flowers had been replaced with blood red roses, with thorns poking in and out. The rest was a dark black, covering everything with a tint. My eyes, hair, Keyblade, and personality all matched. Aura turned around, snapping her fingers and the world froze. The had stopped, Riku’s face was stuck in a horrified position, his Keyblade summoned. She and I were the only things moving on the Island. I looked around puzzled. I look over at Aura, her hands up in a snap. I lunched at her, my hand outstretched. Right before I could hit her, she flicked her hands inward, and in a puff of Darkness 2 black fans appeared in her petite hands. She kneeled down on the ground held her fans up and blocked my attack. “I wouldn’t do that if I were you…†she said slyly.
    “Whhhaaaaaa……… You don’t…†I shook my head and lunged at her again. She popped open her fans and spikes popped out, gleaming in the sun. I dropped back, looking around, trying to figure out what to do next. Before I could think, she vaulted forward, threw my keyblade up into the air and leaped. I look up, my mouth gapping and my eyes squinting in the sun. Using her hands, she threw her fans back in forth, slicing my keyblade. The scattered pieces thumped to the ground around me. “Damnit!†I cursed. Before I could curse more, Riku’s Keyblade evaporated into my hand. I held it to the sun. ‘Nifty.†I said to my self. “Lets go ,†I muttered to myself. She landed on the ground, about 10 feet away from me crocked down on the ground with one leg out stretched, the other one bent, and her left hand in the middle. I ran forward ready to fight. She back-hand-springed back dogging my attacks. With a swift blow to the back of the knee, I topped to the ground, the keyblade flew out of my hand. Aura swiftly walked towards me. She stood over and leaned down so that her face was nearly touching mine, her long hair on my skin.
    “For the memories.†She whispered. She raised one of her fans and quickly cut me across the cheek leaving a thin, long gash. Blood tricked down, staining the sand beneath me. She grinned. “Say good bye…†I cringed and prayed I wouldn’t die. Before she could hit me, a dark corridor open up and a man in a black cloak walked out. I recognized him as part of the organization. Aura turned suddenly.
    “That’s enough Aura. We don’t wasn’t the harm the Princess. Not until we have finished… then I will let you do the honors.â€
    Aura bowed her head. “Yes master,†She said miserably.
    “Come Aura. It has already started.†She abruptly closed her fans and stepped off of me and ran towards the corridor. She ran in behind the man, but before she ran all the way though, she turned around, “You might want to help Sora………†She snapped her fingers and ran off.
    The Island sprang back to life. Riku looked down to where his keyblade should have been. I stayed lying down, my cheek throbbing, the blood staining my clothes. Riku looked out at me in the sand, my keyblade near by. He ran to me. Sora reached to the clouds, his head fell back and he collapsed on to the sand.



    Have fun People!
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  7. myoblivion King's Apprentice

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    Ahhh Amazing!!! :p Its Great I Knew She Was Going To Kiss Sora Ooooooo It Makes Me Scream More More More!!!!!!!!!
     
  8. Rosey Chaser

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    IVe already written like half the 5th chapter...........Though it makes me mad i cant write them out when i get and inperation......... *curses* So i dont know when the next one will come out.......... when is your next one coming out? IM GETTING SCREAMED AT!!!!!!!!! *hits you with a rolling pin* :p
     
  9. myoblivion King's Apprentice

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    *Jumps back* Hey xD heheh...did I come out with part 4? I dont think I did....OH well im going to post it right now so heads up ;)
     
  10. Roxas- PARTYMAN MORE LIKE HOMOVAN 73M SUCK MY B****!

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    I seriously love this! Keep going!
     
  11. JellyBeing ALL. THE. BUTTS.

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    “Afraid of a little competition Kairi? Only if you had told him…” She flicked her hair and walked away.

    HA! I'm going to take this a step further cause its fun... hehehe

    Kairi: "OH NO YOU DIDN'T!"
    Aura: "OH YES I DID HONEY! IT IS ON BETCH!"
    Kairi: "OH! IT IS SOOOOOO ON!"


    Me: ....
    ::whips out ma keyblade::
    Me: Don't go all "Bring It On", on me!



    Hehehe anyway sweet chapter! =P
     
  12. Rosey Chaser

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    OMG i can tottaly imagine me doing that to the boys in my grade, but instead of a keyblade, it would be my FISTS!!!!! MUHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!! When is your next chapter coming out?
     
  13. JellyBeing ALL. THE. BUTTS.

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    Hehehe... I love Bring It On and Bring It On: All Or Nothing :p

    Tomorrow night! :D
     
  14. Rosey Chaser

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    SWEETNESS!!!!!!!!!!!!! I that movie is awsome......... Im having a brain block. If i were to bring back 3 organization members who should they be? (Note: Axel would be good and Roxas isnt part of this cause hes part of sora) I dont know who they should be... I NEED HELP PEOPLES!!!!!!!!
     
  15. JellyBeing ALL. THE. BUTTS.

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    Axel to me would be a must!
    Demnx.... oh dear god I can't spell tonight.... cause well he is just funny EX: "Run! Run away!" "Dance water, dance!"
    ....hmmm no roxas.... awwww
    Laraenxe... spelling again.... cause of her temperness!



    :D anyway hoped you liked the ideas
     
  16. Rosey Chaser

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    I think thats who im gonna do. Just cause they are like some of the coolest charactors in the game!:D
     
  17. Rosey Chaser

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    CHAPTER 5 IS FINALLY UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Chapter 5:

    “What the heck!†Riku shouted. He ran over to me “First, what the HECK just happened, second what are you doing with MY keyblade, and third why is yours all chopped up?†he asked angrily. Taking my left hand, he lifted me up.

    “Aura,†I gasped for Air. “Organization, Sora, help.†Blood still washed down my cheek.

    “What do you mean, Sora help?†I weakly lifted up my arm and point to Sora on the sand. Jerking my arm, I howled out in pain, he ran to go see Sora, dragging me with him.

    “Sora, Sora?†He said worryingly, “Are you okay?â€
    I kneeled down and grasped his cold hand. “I’m not feeling a pulse.†I said, my voice quivering. My eyes turned blue again, filled with salty tears.

    “It was her wasn’t it?†I bit my lip and nodded. “That’s what I though.†Riku sighed. “I could detect a dark presence on the Island, and when she was near, the darkness in side me grew stronger. It was part of the reason I liked her. I liked that feeling of being powerful.†He held his head in shame. “I’m sorry I didn’t tell you before.â€

    I reached across Sora and hugged Riku. “â€Its okay, right now we just need to get Sora help. My guess is she did something to him when they kissed.†I thought back to the kiss. There was that dart pain in m chest, but I just ignored it. I closed my eyes and sighed. “ It must have been when she put her hands on his neck. She must have done something then. It was the only times she was actually close enough to him.†I cursed under my breath.

    “Help me roll him over so I can check.†Riku helped me roll him to his back. I picked the hair away from his face so that he wouldn’t be uncomfortable. I felt the back of his neck. I felt a tingly feeling up my arm and into my chest as I brushed my fingers along the hairs of his neck. I could feel my face grow hot. I felt around and felt a small hole in the middle of his neck. I peered over and looked inside. There was a mini dart, about the size of a needle.
    “We need help. FAST.†Riku said, “This is probably made my Vexen.†I looked at him questioningly. “Old Organization member. From what I Remember, Axel killed him. This dart is probably mad to kill quick and easy.â€

    At the thought of Sora dieing because of her, a strong pain in my chest rushed down my arm and out to my fingertips. It erupted and a beam of Darkness shot out of my hands making a dark corridor, swirling on the opposite side of the beach. I fell backwards from the shear force of the power. I lifted myself back up. “What’s happening…†I whispered to myself. I looked over at Riku. “ I say we should find Aura,†I smiled. “And settle this.†I picked Sora up and hoisted his arms over my shoulder so his feet were dragging behind me. I ran over to the entrance of the corridor and walked it. Riku paused hesitantly and ran in after me.

    I walked into the corrider. Dark purple haze surrounded me. The walls were swirls of white, purple and black. “just like I remember…†I looked around. We walked for awhile when Riku turned around. “Geez Kairi. Next time don’t make the corridor SO DANG LONG!!!!!â€

    “Well I’m sorry.†I said sarcastically. “ My shoulders are beginning to hurt. Tell me again why you aren’t carrying Sora?â€

    “Uh, well its your fault.â€

    “IS NOT!!!!â€

    That went on for another 10 minutes.

    We were still arguing when I saw an exit. “LOOK!!!†I cried happily. “It’s a way out!†I regrasped Sora and ran for the door.

    I popped out the other side. I recognized it has the World that Never Was. “What the heck? I thought this world was destroyedâ€

    Riku drew out his keyblade.†I don’t know but I’ve got a bad feeling about it. You should get your keyblade out.â€

    “Three words for ya. Chopped, up, Pieces. And can we please put Sora somewhere safe? It will be easier to fight if we don’t have to worry about protecting him.â€

    “But we don’t want to leave him alone. This is Enemy territory.†I groaned and continued to carry Sora. “ He should really cut back on the Sea-salt Ice cream…†I muttered. “We should start looking for her though.â€

    Riku and I walked until we saw huge skyscraper at least 30 stories high. “A trip down memory lane.†Riku muttered.

    “What?â€

    “Nothing.â€

    I raised an eyebrow. “ Do you know something about this place I don’t?â€

    “Lets just say the Organization likes to do their major fights here. Be very alert.â€

    “Uh….Okay…â€

    “We should go up to the top to get a better view, That way they wont be to do a surprise attack.â€

    I looked up. “How are we going to do that again?â€

    “ You can make us a dark corridor to the top.â€

    “It didn’t go so well last time though…â€

    “Kairi, If you want to save Sora, just do it.â€

    “Fine,†I grumbled. “OPEN SESEME!!!†A heartless scampered by. I bit the inside of my mouth.

    Riku rolled his eyes. “You’ve got to think of something you hate, darkness.â€

    I handed Sora over to Riku. “Aura, evil, kiss, evil, Aura, kiss, KILL!†I shouted the last word to the clouds above me. A corridor appeared. I walked in and almost immediately came out the other side at the top of the building, Riku right behind me, Sora with him. I leaned over the edge of the building. I could see multiple dark alleyways and the whole city was illuminated with the crisp, pale glow illuminating from Kingdom Hearts. The city seemed to be cover in a dark haze, concealing all of its dark secrets.

    I heard a rattling behind me. I turned abruptly, swing my hand in front of me. Standing on the other side of the building was a cloaked figure.

    “ You showed.†She said. She threw back her hood and put her hands behind her neck and flicked her hair out of her cloak. Her hair floated down softly so that it softly touched her clothing. The pale light gave it a lust shine. “I was beginning to think you were a coward.â€

    “I’m not a coward.†I said sternly.

    “Okay then.†She took her hair and twirled it in her hands, looking up at the sky. “ Then you would be fine if I brought back some of my… O how should I put it…. Colleagues.†She stopped twirling her hair and look directly at me. “I’m just so sick of having to travel back and forth from the realm of Darkness just to talk to them. But I only want to bring back three… Who should I choose?†I glared at her. “I know…†She said thoughtfully. “ I shall bring back Larxene. She’s always liked to kill people.†She smiled at me. “ And I’m defiantly going to bring back Demyx. I haven’t heard him play his sitar in the longest time. Lastly… I shall bring back Zexion. He’s always embraced the darkness. Yes, that shall be it.†She snapped her fingers and from the dark clouds above, three bodies fell, slapping against the concrete on the building. Three masses of Haze and darkness entered their chest. I watched the dark masses and I could help but get a cold, frightening feeling in my chest. All of their eyes opened at once. They lifted them selves of the cold ground and brushed the dirt off their cloaks.

    “Well, well, If it isn’t the princess of heart. I’m Larxene.†She had short blonde hair and piercing green eyes. Her voice made me want to go and run behind Riku. But I stood my ground. “ Zexion, be polite and introduce your self. It is the last time before we kill her.â€


    “Whatever.†He brushed his pale silver hair out of his face. I couldn’t help but think he looked like an emo Riku.

    “ Demyx honey, did you bring the vile?â€

    “Uh, hum†He handed Aura a clear vile, halfway empty with a green liquid, swishing around. She slipped it into her pocket.

    “I would like you to meet my TRUE boyfriend and last guest, Demyx.†She leaned lightly and gave him a peck on the cheek. “ He’s my real boyfriend. I only pretended to like Sora, so well that I could get close enough… to well, kill him.†Her voice was soft and cruel. She took out the vile and twisted it between her fingertips. “The antidote.†She put it back in her pocket. She put her hands on Demyx’s shoulder, lifted up her foot and kissed him, again. “O, and Kairi? Sora only has 30 minutes left to live. Chop, Chop!†She said in a high-pitched voice.

    “Give me the Antidote.†I said, my voice on the brink.

    “Naw, don’t feel like it.†She tilted her head to the side and yawned.

    “I said, GIVE ME THE ANTIDOTE!!!!!!†I screamed; I could feel my eyes fire up.

    She picked at her nails. “Nah, don’t want too.â€

    “NOW!!!!!!!†I loded with anger and frustration.

    She rolled her eyes. “Your going to have to do better than that if you want to save Sora…â€

    My face cringed up, my eyes turned glowing red, my hair was sticking up on end, My whole body was shaking.

    “I WONT LET SORA DIE, NOT TO A B**** LIKE YOU!!!!!†I screamed. I felt a horrendous pain in my stomach. I looked down, my stomach was leaking out darkness. Billions of needles of pain embraced my body. I screamed body murder as the pain engulfed my body. Darkness crawled out of my body. I heard Riku shout out, “KAIRI!!!!†Then everything went black.
     
  18. valorwithinchaos Merlin's Housekeeper

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    :eek: :eek: SOOO GOOOOD! MUST HAVE MORE!!
    i hope sora is ok!!! that Aura is a B****!!
     
  19. Rosey Chaser

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    Heh. I know. Aura is a B**** and we love her for it (not really but whatever). I hope sora is okay too, But i can do what i want *shifty eyes*

    I just realized thats probaby my longest chapter yet.
     
  20. JellyBeing ALL. THE. BUTTS.

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    Another moment brought to you by mentos and diet coke:
    “I WONT LET SORA DIE, NOT TO A B**** LIKE YOU!!!!!†I screamed.

    Hahaha... that chapter was really good! Zexzion sweet choice, he cool I like his mystery that surrounds him.