As I Close My Eyes

Well heres some poetry i hope you guys enjoy it :)

As I lay I wonder was it realy worth it,
before I say my last words would you remember it,
would I only be a memory or an heart ache,
sure I may be gone but if we never met I know my heart would ache,
so I ask myself why did I risk my life,
the answer is i wanted to protect my happyness your life
as I bleed I fell pain and sadness,
but when I see you by me all I can do is smile from this strange happyness,
so before I enter my never ending sleep I will say I love you,
all I need to hear is I love you coming out of you lips,
I smile as I replay my memories seeing the same lips kissing min,
clossing my eye lids smiling for all the good times i spent with you.

 

aw, thats a nice poem

 

thanks i was listening to music when i typed this do you think i should enter a poetry contest?

 

of course, billy, thats a really good poem. :)

 

I find this poem really deep..I'm not sure why...but it does..

 

Couple problems, this is the wrong section. You want the poetry section of the Original Works.

Second = spelling errors.

Also, what is line 6 supposed to mean? That is the one line that I was drawn out of because I don't understand what 'to proctor my happiness your life' is supposed to mean. It feels like this is either multiple ideas coming together or a word or two were missing. But proctor seems out of place for this poem.

 

srry it was suppose to be protect and i tried to delet it since its in the wrong section but it wont let me

 

That was really sad and deep! D=

I loved it! <3

Can't wait for more! >w<

 

Easy fixes, you can just go and edit the spelling errors by clicking edit, and instead of deletion, have the section leader just move the thread.