Am I a Failer at writing

Seriously they only time anyone ever posts on my writing threads is when i make them or it's about someone else(points to my thread about ioan).

I mean seriously i saw a thread with this really crappy story and the person couldn't even write and they had like 8 posts on theres.

/rant

 

*Am I a failure at writing

Though I would like to point out a couple of things. First being

And second being that quality of OP is not relevant to amount of replies.

 

actually most that you showed was my joke inside my post. but seriously i don't type like that on my stories since i use Microsoft word.

 

Before anything else, learn proper grammar and spelling.

The way you do anything is the way you do everything. Something I read in an arts class.

 

That's bullshit right thar.

 

Thanks for agreeing with me ;D

Back on topic though, post a link to your best work and I'll give it a read through.

 

the best one i have posted here is only one chapter (and of course it fails for being a fanfic, however it most people don't know about the series).


http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?t=82486

that is my best recent work, i'm working on more chapters. Its also my only recent work.

 

I stopped at the first paragraph.

TOO. FUCKING. CLICHED.

Full Bullet Armor? Ryan Sigars? 9th Grade?

Grow some originality.

 

Originality? In a FANFIC?

 

That is his name. :D​

 

two questions
one why my name
and two have you seen the movie? or read the book, what about the manga?

 

One: It's trying too hard to sound cool and edgy. Ends up sounding really cheesy.
Two: Why should I have to know a previous media source to enjoy a story? (That's a no, by the way)

I know that, and it made me laugh and frown at the same time.

 

That's good to hear, buddy. ​

 

My actual name sounds cool and edgy and cheesy? And the reason i asked about seeing it is because in the movie/book/manga they are in ninth grade.

 

It's hard to take the story seriously if you put yourself in it. And I find the 9th grade thing annoying because I've heard a million and one stories about teenagers being the heroes all the time while the adults are more or less creepy villains or filler characters.

If you really want to start becoming good at writing, try to make something completely new and different. Granted, it would be difficult, but it would also extract more creativity, which is a really good thing for a writer to learn to use as soon as possible.

 

key fanfic, but i did write a story with adult hero's.
http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?t=65001

its my favorite thing i've ever written really long as well. But its also a complete failure, and i'm rewrittening it chapter by chapter.

 

Interesting.​

 

I'll put down what I found wrong as I read through:

-You use Riku's name too much. It'd be better to use terms such as "he" to avoid repetition
-Don't give characters last names if they don't have them normally.
-The letter is mega-cheese.
-"Goodbye, Riku, Forever" sounds really awkward.
-Lack of proper punctuation is frequently present in the next paragraph.
-Secret base? This sounds way too convenient...
-Riku's crying? He was just sounding like he didn't give a shit about the guy or his house earlier.
-Time skips are used too much. Seems like a lazy way to progress the story just to get to interesting parts. All of it should be interesting though.
-More murder of proper punctuation ("YOU MURDER!"? C'mon now, that's just lazy)
-Hayate's horse dies ALL OF A SUDDEN. I think that'd be a tiny bit more important than you made it out to be.
-Useless info about a useless Sharingan. Don't do that.

I'd read more, but I was bored from it.

 

O_o...Yeah.