Even the smallest animals have feelings. "it was like it said: "Hi!" At least, it wouldn’t surprise me if they have. Even insects can build trust in you, if you don’t scare them away like everyone does. Trust. Trust? Insects? What? “How could something as a fly or an ant possibly build trust on you?†It’s something I’ve heard. I’ve learned something the other day, it went a little bit like this: I went to mom’s for my little sister’s birthday. The whole mother’s side of the family was chatting with each other, when I noticed a small ladybug on the arm of the couch I was sitting on. At first it didn’t seem to have interest in me at all. It just sat there on the white clothed couch, motionless, staring at the rest of the crowd. I tried to let it walk about on my hand, so I slowly placed my index finger inches before his white spotted head. I saw it moving backwards slightly, while rotating it’s body towards me. It looked rather reluctant, and ready to fly away out of defense at any moment. I tried to stroke its back shield, and I gently raised my finger again. The ladybug took babysteps away from me, but it kept looking at me, no matter how scared it must’ve been. I decided to pick it up, and let it walk about on my hand. I wanted to show the bug that I wouldn’t hurt a fly. The ladybug must have realized that it couldn’t go anywhere, and fold it’s legs into its shield for protection. Knowing it was afraid, I decided to put it back on the couch, and leave it alone. After having chat with the rest of the people in that room, I noticed the ladybug walking towards me slightly. I slowly placed my hand next to the insect. The ladybug slowly climbed my finger, up to the palm of my hand. At that moment, I thought the ladybug was sure of it that I wouldn’t hurt him a bit at the moment I put it down again on the couch just now. It walked about on my hand, from my index finger to my whrist, and back. It wasn’t shy and timid at all like it was a few minutes ago. I decided to put it back to show it I wouldn’t scare it away or kill the poor creature. It looked at me again, and then rotated towards the room, as it opened its shield and flew away. My little cousin and neice noticed the insect fly away and tried to catch it, but without succes. It flew around the room, as the children chased it. Mom had to grab hold of the vase to avoid it from falling off the table. After it flown a few circles around the room, it suddenly landed on my arm again with white spots on its eyes pointed to me. It was like it said: “Hi!†My neice tried to wave it off my hand, but the ladybug flew away by itself, out of the window. By then it was gone. ---
Nice, cute idea and I especially liked the italics at the start. You need to proof read. Even a simple spell checker would have picked up some more obvious mistakes such as the mispelling of "wrist". Proof reading to yourself would help with some sentences that didn't seem to make sense or have words missing out. I'll show you some examples that I picked up on. ^ correction version. You could also go into a bit more detail where the ladybug is concerned. How can you tell it was looking at you? It's eyes are tiny. The ending was also slightly anti-climatic. It would have been a nice idea to repeat what you said at the start in italics again at the end. It becomes more of a message then, and the story won't seem like it's ending so... miserably.
You see, the fun thing is, I can't run spellcheck on my computer. My Word Office isn't complete, and I can't pay for any upgrades... Thanks you though.
I don't even have Word on my laptop, but I manage a spellcheck by using programs like word processor instead. Do you have that or something similar? Only a poor workman blames his tools, remember >3
It was just a reminder not to make excuses when I know you're perfectly capable of making those improvements. I didn't mean to offend, your story is lovely. :3 Now let's stay on topic, kay?
