ACTUALITY - A KHV Fanfic

Loving the update.

I'll admit, I started laughing over the Iron Doctor thing, and I hope you can update again soon.

 

I like your interpretation of KHV, it's pretty awesome (and from what I've seen unique too). The way you space paragraphs is a bit weird for me, it's slightly unconventional. But it's not a huge distraction, so if you prefer it that way, keep it. I wouldn't mind being included in the story, btw, so far I think the only time I've been included was as a mouse xP Not saying I didn't appreciate it, Ace!

 

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Dammit, you beat me to it.

I'm writing chapter 5 right now.

Probably in the next few chapters.

Teq has to recover his memory first.


DAMMIT I JUST GAVE YOU THE MAIN IDEA OF THE NEXT CHAPTERS

 

COMIC SANS!?

Here are some errors I spotted.

Self-explanatory.

Unnecessary line break in the middle of sentence.

The indentation for chapter one does not match the other two.

Good luck.

 

Too lazy to fix.

Deal with my mental issues.

 

There go your chances of writing with me.

 

The whole point of a fanfic is the story and structure of the aforementioned story.

Not the presentation.


Oh well. From what I'm hearing from other Users, you're missing something good.

 

I liked it, I just have a major problem with imperfections. Call me CLU.

 

You + TRON = NO WAY

Wait. That's not a bad idea for the story.


MAK YOU'RE A GENIUS

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k done

 

I keep meaning to mention to you how much I am enjoying this.
But then I don't.
Well know I am,at last.

I like your writing style my dear,and it must be said it is lovely how fast you are writing the chapters~
Keep up the great work sweetie <3

 

So I'm tinking about making this fanfic a little more "interactive".


Should there be an OCC poll where people should choose the two Users who go on the journey? Or should I pick them myself?


Opinions are not only welcome, they are needed.

 

I wanna go. Totes serious. B|

Alternately, Cat and Makky Mak should go. Cat can summon hot older men to assist you and Makaze can debate any enemies to death. Or destroy them with his cynicism. You could also take Kelly and Daxa. If you encounter any enemies, Daxa has probably already stalked them and knows their weaknesses. I don't think I need to state reasons why Kelly would be useful.

 

I can see Cat going. She'd have a sort of 'Tifa' air to her. As for Mak.... I can't see him fighting as much as solving problems.


Kelly and Daxa? Meh.



If I can get at least 10 combinations of two Users, I will put that in a poll and the people can decide.

 

If you use polls to decide characters/plots, make sure you remember that you have the final decision. Don't follow the popular opinion if you don't agree with it, go with what your gut tells you.
/je suis une artiste!

Nice update (ohai me), your taking this to a weirdly interesting place!
From a more technical point of view, might I suggest that you put chapters into spoiler tags? It's not too bad yet, but when you end up having 10+ chapters it can get a bit tiresome to scroll through all of the previous ones when an update is made.

 

On it.


So far I have:


★ Cat and Mak
★ Kelly and Daxa
★ Machi and Cat
★ Midny and Cat
★ ~Ryanosaurus~ and Loxare
★ Loxare and DT
★ DT and DH

 

So the options for my quest are me and Makaze (intellectuals unite), me and Modny (gurrrrl powr), or me and Machi (LatinoBros).

Tough choices here bro. You put some good pairs up...

 

TTHIS IS THE ONLY OPTION.
Alternatively; DT and Marushi. Oh the shipping jokes you could have.
But wait, you could easily do shipping jokes with me and DH anyway. We are, after all, an official ship according to the thread.
Hm... tough choices indeed. Honestly, I'd quite like to see some Makaze in the story.
But ultimately the choice should be yours, not ours.

 

You could always do something odd like make two teams of people or something,or just swap pairs around after a while due to random things happening etc.
That made no sense as usual. Ah well.
Also,Kelly and Daxa for the win.

 

You know, you could make the options to pick one guy and one girl and let people pick one from each. The two individuals with the most votes go together, unless one of them objects, then the runner up takes it.

 

That's actually my second idea.


Would you or anyone else mind making the OOC poll? I can't at the moment.