It was a strange day today in the small town of Maccana. The trees were all covered in white sheets of snow. The ground was so full of snow that you couldn’t see the road. My mother told me that this was not a good sign. I laughed at her and wagged my tail as I placed my paws on the snow. I regretted it when I touched the cold snow because I fell into it and passed out. I knew that sleeping was the stupidest idea I could ever have but I’m a wolf so I’ve had stupider ideas. By the time I woke up my mother assumed I was dead so I slowly clawed my way to the surface, gasping for air. My cognitive functions weren’t working right now due to hypothermia and dehydration.
This is pretty interesting, but so far seemingly pointless (yet alluring). But it is likely just an introduction and they tend to seem that way. I would like to read any more if you have any. By the way, it would be nice if you put some space between each paragraph or indent them.
Ah, that has happened to me too. Could always edit, if you desired. So, what is this? A short story, long story, fanfiction, etc.? And if more is to come do you plan on updating at set intervals or randomly? Sorry if I am asking too much. Kind of curious is all. ^^'
It's not a fanfiction and I plan on updating randomly. I'm not sure if it will be a long story though.
When I finally gathered enough wits I realized that I was being watched. “What do you want?†I snarled at the wolf watching me. The wolf was a female, no older than forty-five. She was also about to have a family pretty soon. Suddenly I heard a strange gurgling sound so I ran away from the sound.
Seems kind of short to start out with... Just saying... >> Also, you can try to combine sentences together to make it sound good instead of awkward, such as instead of: You can do: Little changes like that can really make the story come to life. Try to write a little more each time. Maybe have up to at least 20 lines or 2 paragraphs, each of them containing 5 to 8 sentences to the most. If you write just a bit more with little changes and a little more and better description, you can catch the attention of your audience right away. *Salutes* Happy writing.
