Kingdom Hearts and The Knock on the Door " Bye Mom!" Said Demyx and Axel as there Mother ran out into the car. " BYE!" "Ok kids lets play a board game then I'll cook you dinner. " Said Kairi it was her first babysitting job and she didn't know what else to say or do. They all started to play ' Sorry , Disney Edition' and were having a great time. " Dinner time!" They ate a great dinner then continued playing. BOOM BOOM! Went the door. and they ignored it and kept playing their game. BOOM BOOM! " LET ME IN!" a rough voice said. They started to panic. " It's ok just keep playing." Kairi tryed to calm them down. BOOM BOOM! " LET ME IN OR I'LL KILL YOU!" The voice said. Kairi was in the house with two wailing 8 year olds on her first babysitting job. The only thing she was worrying about was ' If a stranger calls'. The phone rang. " Did you check the children, OH AND LET ME IN OR I'LL-" She ran upstairs and and locked the door. The kids ran under the bed . Their Mother was pulling in the drive way, Kairi wa trying to say " Don't come in hand signals. Suddenly a burn , dead hand was around Kairi's throat. " WHEN I TELL YOU TO LET ME IN YOU LET ME IN!" She dropped to the floor. The Mother sped away in her car not caring about Axel and Demyx. The dead man left and the kids didn't come out of the bed, because they were to scared to die. They decayed under the bed where their skeletons lay. They now haunt the WORLD THAT NEVER WAS for their mistaken death. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- BASED ON A DREAM I HAD. Did you check the children?
I think if you would've written it a little better, it would have been a lot more effective. Make sure to check that grammar, m'kay?