First time posting one here in forever The young hero awoke and left his house He hugged his son and kissed his spouse He was going to leave to live his dream To travel beyond his town by the stream With a gleam in his eye and a map in hand He left in search of the promised land He followed the map and traveled far With few rests or naps but many scars From every encounter and every fight But he kept going until it was in sight The valley in which the promises lay He finally reached his promised day Into the valley he quickly went To be repaid for the energy spent But he found was not what he expected He found a treasure chest, empty upon inspection He was ashamed and couldn't go home And so he unsheathed his blade and cut to the bone ...yeah =T
That was very sing-song, almost like a nursery rhyme :v Your rhyming was basic but it actually worked really well, except where it's a bit dodgy at the end with "inspection" and "expected" not really working out. Some of the lines seemed to go on for a bit too long and ruined the flow. (Especially the third line from the bottom). I wasn't expecting such a...uh, pleasant ending. ;_; Good though.
