A poem im actually proud of

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  1. pipedownandlisten Destiny Islands Resident

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    I wrote this yesterday. I've written poems before, but I've hated them all. This one, though, I actually like. Maybe its because it actually has some kind of meaning to me. It may not even be that good, I'll leave that up to you, the readers.

    I used to think I was a beaten guitar
    My last owner played me too hard
    But I wasn't made to sing that kind of song
    And then you came along
    You need me as much as I need you
    And I've never felt this well in tune
     
  2. Krown King's Apprentice

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    I think that is a really good poem.
    And I am pretty sure I understand the meaning of it, though it's pretty obvious what it is.
    I would like to hear some of your other poems, sometime. I'm sure theyre just as good.
     
  3. very nice like it on facebook twitter and youtube
     
  4. Peace and War Bianca, you minx!

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    like the simple nature and tone of the poem.

    To be honest, people always write their best poetry work when it's based on something they think or feel. If you write poems like this in the future, i'd be happy to read.

    Good job.
     
  5. pipedownandlisten Destiny Islands Resident

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    Thanks you guys! That means a lot to me! If I ever write any other good poems, I will post them here for you to see. I'm glad you like it, that's just the motivation I need to work on even more!
     
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    Aww thats a nice poem :) usually I dont get the message but this one was pretty simple.
     
  7. pipedownandlisten Destiny Islands Resident

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    I like to be obvious. :P
     
  8. Technic☆Kitty Hmm

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    Excellent poem and i'm gonna feel like a **** pointing this out but, shouldn't this be moved to the poetry section? But still, good poem ^_^
     
  9. pipedownandlisten Destiny Islands Resident

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    Uh oh. Did I post in the wrong section? Wouldn't be the first time. But thank you! I'm glad all of you like it!
     
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    I like it. I think you should make it longer and turn it into a song.