A Metafictional song

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  1. Noroz I Wish Happiness Always Be With You

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    I start off with a cute remark
    Something only I would notice
    I describe your picturesque face
    And being with you makes me feel
    Then you join in and sing the same
    about me

    This should be a duet
    A song between lovers
    This should be a duet
    But it's missing a voice
    It's missing your voice

    I continue to express my feelings for you
    I go on and on about you
    Then you join in and confess your feelings for me
    You sing of our memories
    And the last line in our song
    we sing in harmony

    This should be a duet
    A song between lovers
    This should be a duet
    But it's missing a voice
    It's missing your voice

    We sing our love won't falter
    We sing our love will last
    And we sing in harmony
    "I Love You"

    This should be a duet
    A song between lovers
    This should be a duet
    But it's missing a voice

    This should be a duet
    A song between lovers
    This should be a duet
    But it's missing a voice
    It's missing your voice


    Oh, and the bridge is supposed to be sarcastic in the way that I depict the "perfect" relationship :)
     
  2. Roxas&Sora4E Traverse Town Homebody

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    I actually liked it,
    It was pretty good,
    and I see no problem why other people shouldn't...
    It was great... Good job...XD
     
  3. Styx That's me inside your head.

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    Sarcastic or not, the bridge had a rather melancholy tone to it. The repetition almost gave it a voice of its own. Great job with that.
     
  4. Noroz I Wish Happiness Always Be With You

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    I guess that's a better word to use.

    Thanks for the response, both of you :)