A Kiss, a Lie, and a Deception (Chapter 1)

It's Time I Reclaim my title as a Author! It's been about 3 years since I wrote a fanfic, and I say it's time I finally wrote another. So, now it's time for the usual intro, This is my first fanfic in 3 years so please, give me the straight facts, no being easy on me, I want true to heart feedback, Good and Bad right down to the bare bone.


Disclaimer: I don't own Kingdom Hearts, Sora, Kairi, Riku, or ANYBODY, ANYTHING, or ANYPLACE from the Kingdom Hearts Universe. I Own the plot, and any charecter I make up. So no Sueing action, no flaming, and no "You suck, stop writing" Tell me what I'm doing wron please

Arigato ^_^
DiZ

Chapter 1: Return

~Sora's Morning~

Sora woke up that morning with a humongus yawn. It's so odd...being home, with no danger....and no Donald or Goofy waking me up with their usual nonsense. Sora chuckled, thinking about all the good and fun times they had on their quest. He jumped outa bed, looked in the mirror, and decided to leave his scraggly brown, pointy haired bedhead alone. He threw on his clothes that the 3 Fairy Godmothers gave him. He thought about all that had happened what Yen Sid had said. The Heartless and Nobodies were still around sure, they always will be, but as long as he was with Riku and Kairi, none of it really mattered to him. His next quest, he grinned, was to get his feelings across to Kairi, and maybe a kiss. Sora sighed happily at the thought of him and Kairi kissing.

"Sora!" His mother called, "Breakfast is ready! Come on down my little hero!" Sora woke up from his little day-dream and rushed down the stairs to the inviting smell of waffles. (AN: yummy...I like waffles:p :D )

~Riku's Morning~


Riku sat in his bed with a grimace. He had been up all night with the thought of darkness resting in his brain. So much had happened in so little time, He had opened the door to darkness, sided with Maleficent, Fought his best friend, Sided with the Heartless, Let Ansem take over him, Made Friends with the King of Disney Castle Got Trapped in the Realm of Darkness, Fought Members of the Orginazation, Captured Roxas for DiZ, Turned into Ansem, Turned back into himself, and Finally helped Sora defeat Xemnas. All that in 2 years (AN: I honestly don't know if that's correct....so don't blame me) He did a lot of bad, and a lot of good, turned from Darkness to Light, So what did that make him? Did it make him the like the Nobodies? Stuck in Twilight? He scratched his head confused. So many questions, so very little answeres...He looked at his Clock, 8:00 AM. He threw on his jacket over his shirt and walked outside to the Beach.



~Kairi's Morning~


Kairi was a slow riser and woke up promptly at 8:00 AM. she rubbed the sleep out her eyes and smiled. Everyone was home at last, Sora and Riku were finally back at Destiny Islands with her. Tidus, Wakka, and Selphie were happy to see them back, but no more happy then Kairi. She was glad the two men of her dreams finally made it home, now comes the most difficult part, picking between the two of them. (AN: I know, I know, this is in most fan-fics, but it's a commen base, not my fault now is it ;)?) She Thought long and hard about their positive's and negative's. Sora was a righteous hero of the light, very laid-back, funny, and was always there for her, and when he wasn't, was searching for her. Riku was a mix of light and dark, making him very intruiging, was also looking for her when she lost her heart, was very stern and always stayed focus, and very deep. She liked them both almost equally, it made it THAT much harder to choose. She threw on her school clothes, grabbed her suitcase, and headed off. Just because she helped bring the two best friends who saved the world together doesn't mean she doesn't have to go to school of course.



~Somewhere Off~

"Is it time yet?"

"No Din, not yet, but the Orginazation will rise again, we just need to turn the Keyblade masters against each other."


"How will we do that?"


"We use the girl...of course, but we're going to have to have you start"


"Yes Leader, of course."




HAH!!! Chapter 1 done!!! please leave comments and feedback^_^


Arigato
DiZ

 

Awesome story so far!

I lol when she called them men


Maybe you should attempt to make it a bit longer (not that I am the one to be talking about that)

but great start!

 

glad you found it funny :p never meant it to though ^^;


I never was very good at making it long, but i'm glad you like it :D:D:D

 

i like sora's daydream hehe and i'm happy that riku is back to being good
and i feel really bad for kairi....run away kairi run away!

i loved it great job when is chapter 2 comming?

 

glad you enjoyed it, I intend to get a couple more comments before I begin to work on Chapter 2. Sora's Daydream is basically my every day dream, except not with Kairi, a Girl near where I live *blush*:o We don't know about Riku yet, and why should Kairi run? She has 2 awesome guys who like her, she's living the American dream! xD:D


all aside, thanks, glad you like it so far! ^_^

 

good point sora and riku best stay by her side^_^
ooowww i can wait till chapter 2

 

Nicely done. I liked seeing the different points of view. I have one suggestion: please do not use words like gotta, kinda, outa/ outta. Unless you desire to use it in dialogue... Don't judge me, I'm strict about grammer and spelling. LOL<--- but I use this (how ironic)

 

sorry I never replied, it's been quite a while since I was last on.

Ironic indeed, but your suggestion is greatly appreciated and I will be sure not to do that next time.

thanks ^^ I'll try to get the next chapter up today ^^

 

Hey, no problem. When I write I always like have to read through it about 3 times.... spelling and grammer issues. I <3 spell checker for that! lol But mostly spelling...

 

I like it! ^-^

Good job. =3

 

Thanks ^^ I would've gotten out the chapter today, but I've been studying Japanese as of late, and I was copying some words for a bunch of my friends who wish to know some Japanese, I'm transforming them into little Japanese-Americans!!! but, never you fear, if I finish up tonight, I will try to get it done tommarow ^^:)


Sayonarra! :D

DiZ