...of words, yo. Now think up a beat and just dig it Little boy Danny was sitting in his room Mama had told Danny to sweep it down with the broom In a little top attic hidden in a room so white Little boy Danny went and snuck a peak at night In this old dusty attic was a hallway so far In this old dusty attic sat a dusty old guitar He plucked on a string and it let out a noise He plucked on that string and felt like one of the boys He played another sound, and his heart began to pound. A rhyme came to his head, and it was like the silence dropped dead. See, little Danny found the blues, he found the means to cut loose, but then mama came on up and rid those strings of their use.
Powerful piece, it gives me a feeling the kid Danny is being 'abused' by his mother. That she think he doesn't deserves to have fun and things like that. Very simple piece yet very effective. It resonates the innocence of the kid. Keep up the good work! n.n
Thank you, a' thank you very much. I was worried that last line would've killed it. Not many good words to rhyme with loose XP
Oh I really like it :3 It kinda like a rap,yeah? It has a really good beat,and nice rhyming used xD Great work :D