Your improving. Try to add more details to the background. The render needs a bit of a flow. Try smudging or something on it. It needs more colors. Try some gradients. And the text can be bigger and different. Otherwise, keep it up. Getting better.
It looks pretty good from wat I can c. The only thing that bothers me is the black and white squares on the sides, they look a bit lobsided and disproportional. Also, rendering some more might help.
yeah. you are improving =] I love the font, nice choice. And Athrun looks good too. I suggest putting him in the far right and continuing the purplish pattern you have there along to the left side. The checkered pattern is too much, and stands out too much. Take it out and it will look really clean and simple.
