Worries and Such

My friend asked me to write something.This came from it. Not one of my bests I'll admit. Actually its probably rather horrible. Feedback please? ;3



Keep it going;
Don't stop.

If it stops,
its gone.

I don't want
it gone.

I'd be lost
without you.

Not knowing what
to do.

Having no point,
it'd hurt.

Don't leave me,
I'm begging
you.

 

1. I would suggest making each of your lines a little longer.

2. in a poem you do not need to use commas

3. Capitalize the first letter of each line

 

Thanks. However,
1-The lines are supposed to be short
2-I always use commas
3-You don't always need to.

But thanks =D

 

Keep it going;
Don't stop.
( Don't shouldn't be capatilized if you aren't following number 3)

Don't leave me,
I'm begging
you.
(if its all one sentance why is the word I'm capitilized then)

 

I capitalize when it looks right to me. Seriously, its just how my writing goes.

 

Eh, thanks. I know its confusing. My friend tried to explain what she wanted and apparently she liked it, which surprised me because it is choppy.