Harsh words & violent blows Hidden secrets nobody knows Eyes are open, hands are fisted Deep inside I'm warped & twisted So many tricks & so many lies Too many whens & too many whys Nobody's special, nobody's gifted I'm just me, warped & twisted Sleeping awake & choking on a dream Listening loudly to a silent scream Call my mind, the number's unlisted Lost in someone so warped & twisted On my knees, alive but dead Look at the invisible blood I've bled I'm not gone, my mind has drifted Don't expect much, I'm warped & twisted Burnt out, wasted, empty, & hollow Today's just yesterday's tomorrow The sun died out, the ashes sifted I'm still here, warped & twisted
Hmm... I really liked your poem. It has a lot of raw emotion in it, but delivered in a more conrolled matter. I'm not really into writing poems myself, so I don't have a whole lot of input, but still very good. :D The only thing close I've written to this were two poems that were a mix between a poem and a short story. <_>; The only thing I would say is take out the '&' signs and type out 'and,' but then again that's just me. It's like a little pet peeve of mine. X3
