Last one was sucky think this one is to oh well whatever plz CnC but i think other chps might be better dunno Chapter 1 The Gods Dession The worlds are a mess and in choas. The cause of all of this are Oblivion and Koga two groups wich lives to wipe out the other. At first no one even bothered with them or even would of thought that they will become even alittle strong they all beviled that their gods are the only ones to fear or to praise.Unfortunly they hated each other so much that they became stronger than the gods themselfs. Their fights more violet than ever before. Anyone who was unlucky enough to get caught in the middle of the battles never made it out. Many died but even more lost everything. The Gods held a meeting. "Well any Ideas Trinya?" a God asked (note made names by hitting ramdom letters) "Why ask me? I thought you said you could handle anything Jermria"Trinya answered "Enough you two"a goddess had appered "Sorry Yang"the first God said "they are stronger than us so we need someone stronger than them"Yang had said no longer paying any attetion to the two Gods who were imuture "Not a bad idea Yang"anther Goddess had said "She shall be made after you Yang seeing how you thought of the idea" anther God had siad, this one seemed to be like a leader "Her name Ying. Power of all meaning Light, Darkness, Water, Wind, Fire, Luck(my pishic and foresight kinda thing) Earth, and Lighting" he said "Not only our fate lays with her but of that of all of the worlds and their people who live on them"
I think you should have made a lengthier passage. There's not much to like or dislike in the short one here.
