People been complaining on my old one so here! A girl appeared in front of the gate to the castle in Twiglight Town,A man in a organization cloak appears "Do you wish to know the truth"he asked her it was some how croaky yet husky a bit with a side of mysteriouse The girl looked up at him she had red hair streaks in them of black her eyes red,she looked empty wobbily a bit she was wearing pants and long sleeved shirt it was cut in half.One half white the other black the right side right the left side black her shoes matched the color too.Her eyes looked tired as if she had nothing to do accomplish no goal or mission just empty. The man pulled out his hand and a big twiglight color went around her to spell out Mexan it swirled around her"Now here is you'r name"He said The girl looked at it"M-M-Mexan.."The girl studderd she looked back up to him to see him chuckling. "exxcellent I"am you'r master"he told her as the words dissapeared,he turned around to open a portal. "W-What is you'r name master?What am I to do?What am i?Why did you bring me here..So many questions..So...AHHH!'she screamed studderd as she got a angry look,but then it turned back to normal if she did not feel that emotions. He chuckled" Don't over do it Just call me master..All you'r questions will be ansewed in time Mexan now go make my new organization.ORGANIZATION ND!."he yelled pushing her in the portal chuckling evily. Mexan was in the portal she looked around it was The World That Never was,there she would find her ansews and as her master said she will create a new organization...She is the keybearer now... Heehaw I'm making a RP of this now he he!
So many spelling mistakes. Plus the organization dude would just pop out of no where and think yeah that person who talked to me is my master already? I don't get that.
dude theer are hardly any mistakes I spelling corrected.And it was imported in ehr mind of who her master was and she doesn't know what to do so she would assume that was her master telling herwhat to do.
you have a load of grammatically problems in this man. Nearly no punctuation, sentences are missing works resulting in them being fragments.
