The Perspective of A Few Helter-Skelter Worlds

I'm already a good bit into this story, and it's been on dA thus far. So I'm going to link to the location on there rather than copypaste it all into this thread.

Call me lazy but it's what I'm doing.

I'll also be notifying people via this thread when there are new chapters up, as long as there is some interest shown.

But regardless, I'm dissatisfied with the amount of feedback I have on it, and would therefore like some if somebody finds that they have the time to read any amount of this.

Link to all chapters; http://loldalk.deviantart.com/gallery/#The-Perspective-Of-A-Few-Helter-Skelter-Worl

Link to the first chapter; http://fav.me/d2y91o5

Go nuts