This is the very first fanfiction I write...and post...I'm still a beginner at this so please don't get mad at me!:D This fanfiction contain a OC I created...It's NEXITAH!! XD Well here is chapter one!:) Chapter one: 7:30 Am. Time to wake up and go to school... Everyday was the same thing: Wake up at 7:30 Am, take a bath and wash your teeth, bla,bla,bla... I was in the 12th grade and I didn't like being in that school...The ones in there were all stupid...My colleagues, my teachers, everyone!! Just because I was different, and they were stupid because of that. I had some strange power in me that scared them...I could push them without touching them I could make things levitate and...everytime I was angry or I cryed out loud, they run away from me because they knew my wings would come out...And I would be seen as a demon from their point to view...My wings...the wings of a Dark Angel... "Good morning class!" The English Teacher, Miss Sanchez, started, she was really annoying, and quite stupid too! She always blamed me and my powers when something bad happened on the school. Always! Sometimes...I wish I didn't have this kind of powers...I just wanted to be a normal person... While the teacher was writing on the board, something hit my head. "Ouch!" It was a pen...Kyle's pen... Kyle was the one who hurted me the most. he was really violent...and the others followed him...They did everything he wanted...He looked like their boss, but he wasn't! "Nexitah...I need to beat up somebody when I get out of school...and I guess that somebody will be you! Or should I say nobody?" Kyle whispered to me and then he started laughing. "What's so funny Kyle?" Miss Sanchez asked with a angry look. "Nothing really...just thinking about something funny..." Once again, Kyle was going to beat me up after classes...well this was almost...part of my routine... Everyday I arrived home with bruises all over my face and body, and my parents didn't care. The only one who cared was...my little sister... 12:35PM Time to go home...after Kyle beats me up... This was weird I was walking outside school and there was no sign of Kyle. I took the opportunity to ran out and try arrive home as fast as I could. When I arrived home there was no one inside... "Mom? Dad? Bia?" I called from the hall and started to search everywhere. They were nowhere to be found...I tried to phone them but their mobiles seemed to be off. Soon I started to search for Yaz, my cat...I couldn't find him anywhere. "Not even Yaz? Where are they? Wha...What's this? I looked to a familly photo we took on the last summer vacations only to realise that I wasn't on the photo anymore. "Oh my God! What's happening?" I quickly ran to my room. It was totally empty. "Where are my things? Why did I disappeared from the photos?" I said really confused, tears starting to fall down my face. "Maybe Kyle was right, I'm nothing, I'm nobody!!!" I said getting down on the floor as I started to cry really bad. My wings came out. "Maybe you should start a new life." An unknown voice. "Who...Who's talking!" I Sobbed. Then a dark portal appeared in front of me and a strange figure came out of it. "Me." The readhead who've just came out of that portal said. "Who are you?" I started to walk back. I was really afraid...and confused with everything... "Hey! You don't need to be afraid! I'm not going to harm you. I'm Axel! A-X-E-L got it memorized? At first I was afraid but soon I started to aproach him. "I...I'm Nexitah..." I introduced myself, still with tears falling down my face. "What are you doing here?" I asked him. "Well, let's just say I came to help you. Ya know...your life isn't easy and...you're kinda different...just like us." Axel said while sitting on the floor against the wall. "You came to help me? How do you know about my life? What do you mean by, "you're kinda different just like us"? I'm confused." "About your life...we've been watching you, and about being different like us I was referring to our powers. Yeah I too have powers." With that a little fire ball apeared in Axel's hand. "So you too have powers..." I whispered to me. "Nexitah...Come with me...I'll promise that from now on, no one's going to harm you ever again. Got it?" He said walking to me and looking me in the eyes. He was on my side...He was going to help me... "Thanks...Axel..." I said while a little tear of happiness fell down. "You don't need to thank me...really...Well let's get in this portal so I can show you your new home and friends! "Axel said while pointing at the portal. and with that we entered. ......>.<......It's over... Well I'm going to write chapter two soon, but I need you're opinion first. So what do you think of the 1st chapter of my first fanfiction?:D
For other people.........it's Desmonic not Desmoniac, ok? For you: já vi pior....Mas tá fixe, tens e de ter kuidado pra nao kriares uma persongem suprema(k lhe akonteça tudo, mate todos, seja o/a maior, esse tipo de cenas..)
it was good for the first time fanfic. I'm giving you a warning. I'm extremely honest, almost brutally honest, and right now I'm asking for your permission to tell ya the bad points in it. :D Sounds pathetic, but I don't wanna hurt anyone's feelings around here. I mean, it wasn't all bad, it wasn't bad at all but there was some parts in there that need fixing. Hahaha, so just tell me if I can be brutally honest with you on your story and I'll point out what's wrong with it, K? :D :D :D
Thanks! :) XxAxelxX You can be brutally honest with me! XDDD I want to correct those mistakes on the next chapter! :D Oh! But please send me a PM! XDDD
Chapter 2 After we entered the portal, we were suddenly inside of a castle. Everything on there was white. It made me relax for some reason..."We're here. Welcome to your new house Nexitah!" Axel said as he grabed my arm and leaned me into a new room. "This is living room. I spend most of the time here watching TV or playing pinball." He said walking in the direction of the pinball machine and started to play a little game. "Axel?" "Yes?" "When you spoke to me earlier, you were...speaking in the plural. When you said, you're different...like us..., remember? Does that mean that you're not the only person living in this castle?" When he heard this, Axel started to laugh, still concentrated in his pinball game. "Of course I'm not the only person who lives here! this castle is too big for only one person! We're like...mmmm...thirteen people in this castle! Fourteen with you! And there are gonna be more soon..." "Really? Fourteen people? That's a lot of people!" I said, enthusiasm in my voice. "Damn! I lost again! "Axel growled then kicked the pinball machine. "So...Wanna go meet those people?" He asked. I was going to meet new people! People like me! With powers!! People, who weren't going to beat me just because I was different! It was like a dream... "Yes!! Yes!! I can't wait to meet them Axel!! But...what if they don't like me?" Axel blinked and walked to me. "Don't say a thing like that! They're gonna like you, believe me!" I looked at him still thinking. "...Come?" Axel kindly asked. He made such a cute face! "All right, All right!! But don't make that face ok?" I laughed. "I'll stop! but now you're going to meet our boss." He went to a door and opened it. "Boss? Why do you call him boss?" " 'Cuz he's the boss!" We walked into the room that looked like a big, big office and a man was sitting in front of a desk. He seemed to be working on something. He looked tall and strong and he had tanned skin and silver hair. " That guy over there, is Xemnas. Talk to him calmly and nicely, he's our boss after all." Axel walked in Xemnas direction. "I'm so nervous! It looks like my heart is going to pop out at any second!" Axel stoped walking at my words. " Your heart? So you still have one..." A sigh. "I wish I could find mine..." "What? You...you don't have a heart Axel?" I asked, confused and surprised at what he had just said. "Nope I don't but I'll tell you about it later ok?" He said and with that he continued to walk in Xemnas direction. Was it true? Was it possible to don't have a heart? "Xemnas, I need to show you our new member, her name is Nexitah." Xemnas quickly looked at me. "A new member...so do you know what to do while you're here?" That question left me even more confused...What to do? Oh my god! What did I have to do while I was there? I didn't know! Axel didn't told me! And what was that about the boss and the...member? "...I don't know...Am I supposed to do something?" Xemnas stared to laugh. "Of course you're supposed to do something! Listen, we are an organisation who fights to get its hearts back, all you need to do, is help us to accomplish our goal, understand?" I was a member of an organisation...Sounded good..."...Yeah, got it!" I said and once again, Axel grabed my arm and we went to another room searching for the other members. "This is the library, try not to make to much noises ok?" Axel started. "Yo'll probably find Zexion here. This is his favourite place of the castle" Axel said and I started to look at everything in that library. It was really big. It had thousands of bookshelves!! "It sure is a big library." I whispered, and then I saw a glimpse of a man sitting on a chair in front of a big table and reading a book. He had a kind of purple hair or something... "Is that guy Zexion?" I asked Axel as I aproached the man. "Yup! I'll introduce him to you." He started to walk in Zexion's direction. "Zexion? I'm sorry to interrupt your reading, but I have to introduce you to our new member." Axel said while taking Zexion's book from his hands. "It was about time someone new showed up." Zexion said and got up from his chair, smilling at me. "I'm Zexion. And you are?" "Nexitah! My name is Nexitah!" I said happilly. "Nexitah, if you need any help on the library you can always talk to me ok?" "You bet!" I answered and started to look at the bookshelves around me. "Well...What about we go see the other members instead of just looking at the bookshelves?" Axel was with his hands on his hips when he said that. "Oh! Hehe...Right!" With that we proceed to another room. (AN: I love rooms...XD XD) Axel opened the door and... "Hyiaaaaaah!!!" A female voice...and a little kunai was thrown at the door...right next to Axel's head. "Jesus, Larxene!! How many times do I have to tell you that I'm not the enemy?" He said as he walked over to the blonde woman, waving his hands in the air, with an angry look on his face. "Sorry Axel! I was training..." "Of course you were training!! We're supposed to train here!! That's why we call this room, The training room, right? Axel's eyes were wide opened whe he said that. He looked like a maniac! "Whatever..." She says and then I felt a hand over my shoulder. "Excuse me...are you a new member?" the voice of a young male spoke. I turned around and then I saw a young boy with blue eyes and blond spikey hair. He was just a bit smaller than me. "Yes I'm a new member, my name's Nexitah" I said to the boy. "I'm Roxas! Nice to meet you!" I turned my attencion to Axel and Larxene. They were not nagging anymore, but now they were with their backs turned on each other, they looked like kids! "Don't worry about them. they're allways like that." Roxas said to me. Larxene noticed my presence and started to walk in my direction. "Who are you?" She asked coldly. "I'm Nexitah, the new member." "Well, if you're a member, why aren't you wearing an organization outfit, like this one?" She said pointing at her outfit. "Oh!! Those outfits!!" I slapped my forhead. "I should have asked Xemnas one...but I forgot..." "Nevermind...so...are you going to help us with our quest?" She asked more nicely this time. "Of course I will!! I'm an organisation member or not?" I blinked. "That's it Nexitah!!" Larxene said while giving me a headlock. "Having fun Larxene?" A tall, blue haired man said. He had yellow eyes, pointy ears and an "X" shaped scar between his eyes. He seemed to be a serious person. "Yeah...more or less...this is Nexitah, our new member, she says she's going to help us find our hearts back." Larxene said and then she pushed me onto the blue haired man. "......Hi......" I was a bit scared. That man looked too strong and the look on his eyes on that moment was just scary. For some reason he reminded me of a wolf....yeah... "I'm Saïx, its a pleasure to have you on the organisation." "Well...guess you guys will have to teach me some tricks when I start my training." I said looking at Saïx. I heard a sound. It came from above me. I quickly looked up at the ceiling and a black portal opened there. A man jumped from it...and falls over me..."Ouch..." My back were hurting..."Sorry there buddy! Wait a sec, new member?" The man who jumped from that portal asked. He had long black hair tied in a ponytail, some scars on his face and he used an eypatch like a pirate. "Yeah...my name is Nexitah..." I answered with my hands on my back. "I'm Xigbar. Sorry 'bout that, really!" "No prob...ouch..." I said, my hands still on my pooooooor back. "What's up guys?" A blond bearded guy said. "Looks like we have a new member. "That was a guy with long black dreadfalls. "The name's Xaldin. The guy here at my side is Luxord, and you are? Xaldin asked, waiting for an answer. "I'm Nexitah." I answered quietly. "Nexitah?" But that's a girl's name!" Another voice said. This time a really big man appeared behind Xaldin and Luxord. "That's because she's a girl..." Luxord said slapping his forehead. "Sorry! I didn't see that! I'm Lexaeus." "You didn't see that?...You must be needing glasses, a good pair of glasses..." Xigbar whipered to himself, crossing his arms... "Say somethin' Xigbar?" "N...No nothing..." "Hey Nexitah, there's someone at the lab, if you wanna see him..." Axel said gesturing to a portal he had just created. "Sure! See ya later guys!!" With that I proceeded to the lab with Axel. "That guy overe there is Vexen, he's a little obcessed with his experiments, but he's a good person." Axel started to say this to me and I just walked around the lab, observing the matierials there and then Vexen's experiment. I look at him, but he didn't seem to notice me ,so, I poked his arm with my finger. "WHAT THE...." Vexen screamed and quickly summoned his weapon which was a shield, I just stood there scared to death with his scream and Axel laughed like crazy at his reaction. "Calm down Vexen!" He said still laughing a little. "It's just our new member, Nexitah!" "Sorry if I scared you, but I was too concentrated on my experiment...I'm Vexen, now can you two please leave the lab? I got work to do..." Vexen said returning his attencion to his experiment. Axel opened a portal and we left the lab. "Jesus!! Axel!! Vexen's mad!!!" I said grabing my hair. "I know that!! I know that!!" Axel was still laughing because of the previous events. "Shhhh!! I'm hearing something!" the sound of a musical instrument echohed in the hall we were. "I love this music..." I started to follow the music until I reached a door. The lovely sound was coming from there. "That's Demyx' room...he's the one playing this music." Axel informed me, then puts his back against the wall, arms crossed. "Well...he's a good player!" I opened the door and Axel falls on his back, into Demyx room. Demyx stoped playing his instrument. "Hey Axel!" He greeted kindly. "Why are you laying on the floor?" He inocently asked. "Demyx...I'm not just laying...I fell..." Axel replied still on the floor. "Hi! I'm Nexitah!! And you must be Demyx right? I loved your music so much!!" I started to jump in joy. "Thanks! I'm glad you like it." Axel got up. "Well you've met 12 of the members, 1 more to go. He's at the garden but I'll leave it to you...I gotta go now!" He summoned a portal and vannished. "I guess I'm going to the garden...See ya Demyx!" I started to walk and then I saw a door with some vines at the entrance. "This should be the garden." I thought to myself and then I opened the door. It was the most beautifull garden I had ever seen in my life. It had plenty of beautifull flowers and a great variety of plants. I had never seen anything like that. At first i was just looking at the nearest flowers, but then I started to walk around the garden to see more. I tripped on something and fell. After I fell a man appeared above me. "Are you ok?" The man said. He had such beautifull blue eyes, and his hair was pink. He looked so calm and nice... "I'm ok...don't worry!" I started to look at him. "You're Nexitah aren't you? I'm Marluxia. Nice to meet you." He said. How did he know my name? "Yes...I am! How do you know my name?" I asked him, surprised. "Xemnas told me about you." I looked at the sky. It was already night. "It's getting late isn't it?" I started, and then looked at all the flowers and plants that were on the garden. "w...would you mind If I stay here with you for some time Marluxia? ...It feels good..." I said as I sat on the grass. "No...I won't mind...you can stay here if you want..." He sats on the grass too. "...Thanks..." I said. With that, we just layed there on the grass as the time passed. ........ 2 words: 1. Too 2. long XD Anyways hope you like it! :)
