The New Keyblader (Part 2) I Hope you guys enjoy reading this, its my own story of a new keyblader being born. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Part 1- The Beggining " Xein! Wake up already!" Xein opened his eyes to see his little sister shaking him. He lifts up and feels his heart, it was beating much faster than it usually did. " Are you okay Xein? You sure is sweating alot." Xein smiles at his sisters choice of wording," I'm okay, just a really weird dream....hey, how'd you get into my room Karissa?" Karissa smiled then took a key out of her pocket. Xein grabbed it. " I've been Looking for that you know!" Karissa smiled then ran out the room before he could say anything else. Xein put the key on the table near him then felt his forehead," I really am sweating...that dream." He could picture the darkness surounding him, the big red and yellow eyes staring down at him. But what weirded him out the most was that a boy was there, telling him to find the light. His sister suddenly comes back in the room," You look like your gonna throw up!" She said that with a giggle. Xein looked up and frowned. " Get out!" She ran out giggling. He looked at his key," Key....blade?" After doing his usual morning stuff, he grabs his key then jumps to his back porch from his window. He was just like sora, he lived on an island to, except it was one big Island with a bunch of people on it, think Destiny Island fused with New York. He walked down the path seeing people running around and hanging out, he pretty much stood out because he was still thinking about that dream. " Xein, what are you doing?" He looked up to see Endless, his friend since four year old, and she sometimes has a big mouth. She was Sixteen just like him but sometimes she acted more mature. " Your gonna bump into something and get hurt sooner or later." Endless put her hands on her hips and grinned. Xein smiled, the only one able to take his mind off the dreams for alittle while was Endless. " Well you always said I was clumsy. I was just thinking about.." She stopped him by putting her finger infront of his face," You gotta stop thinking about those dreams Xein, they're gonna rot your brain." Xein moved her finger out the way and grinned," Either that will or your lectures will." Endless was about to give him a piece of her mind until Ryan, the school bully came. " Endless are you still hanging out with this freak?" Endless crossed her arms and sighed, " Well what do you think i'm doing now?" Ryan just stared at her, he's not exactly smart," You know what I mean." Xein steps in and looks up at him," Why don' t you just back off Ryan, I don't know what your problem is." Ryan was about to slug him until Endless stepped in," If you lay one finger on him, i'm gonna kick you where it hurts. And you know how good I am at soccor..." Ryan backed up alittle," I can see where this is going, i'll see you later." He walked off giving Xein the finger. Endless and Xein walked to the shore as they usually do everyday. Endless went on about people calling him a freak," You know, they only reason they call you a freak is because you believe theres something behind them." Xein didn't want to listen though," But I keep continuing them though, I don't know if I can continue the last one." Endless smiled," And plus people keep calling you gay because you keep dreaming about that boy." Xein would rather be called freak then gay, and he didn't want to be called that, especially infront of Endless. But all she did was smile," I know that its not true though." Thats what she'd always say. " Earth to Xein." He looked at Endless and smiled," Sorry about that." He looked at the sky it was getting unusally dark in this time of day. Endless looked up too," Well looks like its about to storm, but thats more like a scary dark. Doesn't seem like a regular storm." Xein nodded his head then helped her up. " I guess we'd better get home." Endless said with a smile," Xein, don't let Ryan get to you okay?" Xein couldn't help but smile, looking into her eyes just made him feel special. Knowing that whatever happens, she'll always be there to help him. Xein waved her good buy then looked at the sky again, but insted of one part being black, the whole sky was. There was a strong wind and parts of trees were flying everywhere. " Tornado maybe, but we've never had one in summer before." He was running from the beach while watching people run into their houses," Man! I just had to live the farthest." Eventually getting close to his house he heard a strange noise. He looked to see what it was, but then he ended up in an alleyway. He looked into the darkness and saw a dark figure but it was small," Oh its just a cat." Suddenly yellow eyes aappeared which really gave Xein a scare," You!" The shadow heartless stepped out in its akward stance and stared at him. Xein was about to run but then he heard a fimiliar voice," Get away from me! Somebody help!" Xein clenched his fist, that was Ryan in there getting hurt by one of those things. He looked at the shadows deepining eyes," I should...be a better person." Xein charged as the shadow leaped at him, he threw his fist into the air. It collided with the shadows big head and it dissapeared, just like in his dream. He went down the alleyway to see Ryan on the floor. Ryan looked up with blood coming out his nose and mouth, it was like a river of blood. Xein almost threw up at the sight of it. Ryan crawled on the ground," Please..." Xein reached in for his hand but a heartless came and pulled him into the deep part of the alley. All he heard was the scream of Ryan, then it went silent. Suddenly the heartless came out the dark alleyway with a red heart in his hand and it had blood all over it. This time Xein ran the other direction screaming. He had alot of thoughts running through his head," Oh my god, Ryan....that black creature killed him!" He was almost to his house until a dozen of heartless appeared all around him. He felt like yelling for someone until he saw some heartless going into peoples homes, including Endless. The heartless jumped on him and the only thing he had that was sharp was his key. He took it out and held it in his hand. He tried stabbing them but it wasn't enough. When more heartless were on him and he began to go into darkness, all he could think about was Endless. He couldn't take it he screamed the very thing he was thinking about," ENDLESS!!!!" Suddenly there was a shine of a bright golden light in his hand, and all the heartless dissapeared because of its power. Xein stood up feeling he had more weight on him. He had in his hand, the Keyblade. It looked like Soras ultima weapon from the first game except it was purple and Gold. Xein examined it then looked at Endless house. He charged over there but then looked at his house, then back at endless house. Xein couldn't abandon his family, but then he couldn't abandon Endless. Suddenly he saw them go into the church and he smiled," You guys better pray." For some reason he could see this glow coming from it which convinced him of his choice even more. He went straight to the one he loved. He smashed down the door to see a bunch of creatures, except these looked more bulky ans taller than the small ones. The neo shadows charged at him at an incredible speed. He charged back and did a vertical slash at the front ones head. He stabbed one in the stomach which made it dissapear, but he wasn't ready for the sneak attack the last one did. It went underground and stayed for awhile. Xein thought it was gone so he started to look around but then it came behind him and leaped with its claws. He turns around quickly enough to clash with its claws. It was so hard and fast that sparks flew and Xeins body vibrated alittle from the collision. He thrusts his blade up making the shadows claw go up, then spins attack the neo shadow in the stomach making it fly out the window. Xein didn't destroy it so he knew it would be back. He went into her room but couldn't see her," Endless! Where are you?!" " Xein?" Endless come from her closet with a knife in her hand. They just stared at eachother for a second. Tears were about to form into Endless eyes, she dropped the knife then wrapped her arms around him. Xein dropped the keyblade and hugged her too. Endless was getting Xeins shoulder wet by her tears," Xein...those black creatures killed my parents, whats going on?" Xein was about to cry too," I don't know but.....this is my dream." Xein and Endless stayed in her house, Xein was trying to comfort her and the keyblade was still laying there. Xein was telling her of what all that happened, including him having the keyblade. The wind hit against her window, causing it to make that weird sound. Xein hugged her again," Too many bad things have happened...and since this is my dream, its gonna get even worse." Everything the nwent silent, Xein and Endless looked at eachother. They were both thinking the same thing," Is it over?" Suddenly a big roar broke the silence, and Xein recognized it," Get down!" He grabbed the keyblade and forced her to the ground. The roof had a crack in it, and then it lifted up, but by something. A Huge black creature stood over them with red and yellow eyes. It had the roof of her house in its hand, the monster threw it into a raging black hole in the sky. The wind had trees and houses flying everywhere, including into the black hole. Endless looked up and was scared to death, but Xein wasn't. He was used to this ugly creature, but he didn't want to be used to it. He wanted to destroy it. Xein stood up as the whole house suddenly vanished into mid air. Endless stood up also looking at it carefully," So thats the monster you were dreaming about?" Xein nods his head. then looks around the area," Crap, theres nowhere for you to hide." Endless smacks her lips and raises her fists," I can take care of myself thank you." Xein smiled, theres no way she can defeat this thing, but then he could see this glow from her. And he just noticed that everytime he's around her, the keyblade glows brightly. Xein gets in his stance," Either way Endless, i'm not gonna let you get hurt." She gave him a warm smile but that was quickly canceled when the creatures hand was coming towards them. They jump out the way but sees its hand go completely under the ground with darkness surrounding it. Xeins eyes went wide as he saw heartless start popping out of the darkness, and they were all after him. He got into his stance, but then Endless jumped infront of him," Sorry guys but i'm not gonna let Xein get hurt." She gave him a grin and started attacking them. Xein smiled remembered the situation, he looked at the monsters arm and grinned. While Endless was busy taking care of the small heartless, Xein was after his dream. He jumped the monsters arm and stabbed his keyblade into its arm," You've done enough to me already, and your gonna pay!" Xein ran up its arm while his keyblade was slicing through its black arm. The creature yelled in pain and used its other hand to try and stop him, but Xein acted fast. He took out his keyblade and stabbed at the creatures hand. He then ripped it out making the creatures hand look, disformed. Xein looked at the creatures face," You know, i'm getting tired of seeing your face!" Xein ran up his arm and from the creatures shoulder, jumped up and stabbed his sword in its left eye. He made sure to grab one of its tentacles from its head before he ripped out his sword. Swinging from the tentacle, he drove his keyblade into its right eye, making it totally blind. The creature went insane from the pain and started moving alot. Thus the creature swung its head making Xein fly high into the air. He was getting too close to the black hole," No! I'm not done yet." He was being sucked up into it until he thought of an idea. Xein landed on a broken tree and looked down at the raging monster," This is it! Man I hope this works!" His body started to glow and he faced the black hole. He pointed his keyblade at it and fired a light beam from the tip of the keyblade and into the black hole. It went in and as Xein hoped, the black hole hade a small explosion from it, which caused a powerful force to push Xein down. When he was going down while still on the tree he looked to see Endless defeated all the heartless, but more started coming. He remembered what he said, and he's not gonna let her get hurt. Xein gave one last call to the monster," Stay out of my dreams!!" Xein jumped from the tree as it was lodged into the creatures head. Xein crashed into the ground and Endless rushed over. The creature was now dead and started to fly towards the black hole. Endless helps Xein up but there was a faster and stronger wind picking up now. Endless remembered what she studied," Crap! There must have been an explosion in the black hole, cause now its gonna take everything, and possibally dissinagrate everything that hasn't been sucked up!" Xein slapped his forehead," I've done it now!" Endless didn't know what he was talking about but he didn't get to tell her of what he meant. She started dissinegrating infront of him. Xein looked at her wide eyed, he didn't pay attention in the class but he did remember that the dissinegrating will stop if the item is going into black hole. Endless had tears going down her face but Xein grabbed her hand," Endless....I don't know where this black hole will take you but I want you to know that...I love you." She just stared at him then came out," I love you too Xein but i'm not..." Xein used all his remaining strenght to toss her up into the black hole. She looked down at him for one last time, she understood of what he was doing but she wanted to be with him. Xein had tears strolling down his face as she disappeared into the black hole. The wind started to pick him up also along with all the remaining stuff on their world, including water. As he was sucked up into the black hole he stared straight into and only saw darkness. He made a pledge to himself, and he would never forget it. " I will find Endless, and defeat the darkness!!" End of Part 1 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Part 2- BIg Trouble "Man this kid looks messed up." Xein opened his eyes barely, but enough to see the huge crowd looking at him. "Uh.....where a-", he was interrupted by a loud old man. "You needs to stop crowding around this fella," the old man was swinging a cane around."Now let me through you wipper snappers." He was obviously mad. Xein was thrusted up by a big man wearing a flower hat. "This little punk ruined my roses!" yelled the flower keeper. Xein was finnaly able to open his eyes fully, he stared down at the mans flowers. They were all smashed from where his body was, and he had dirt all over him. "I'm sorry sir, it won't happen again ma'm." Xein didn't realize what he said. The mans eyes went blazing red but before he could throw his fist, the old man made it through the crowd. "Let him go young man!" He grabbed Xein by the collar and hit the man with his cane. He of course yelled in pain and jumped around holding his kneecap. "You little bas-", he was cut off by the old man,"What did you say?" While they were having a little skrimish, Xein tried to sneak but the old man tripped him with his cane," Hold it right there sonny." "Look guys, i'm sorry for the trouble." Xein apologized while getting up from the ground. The flower man looked at his flowers and then back at Xein. "Well......since your a kid and all, i'll forgive you." The man sighed and went back into his flower shop. The crowd was about to ask him a bunch of questions but the old man stepped in," Back off you vultures! Kid, follow me to my shop." Xein didn't hesitate to follow, the reason why is that half of the questions they asked, he couldn't answer. When him and the old man made it to his shop, Xein was happy to find that he had a couch. Right when he went towards it, the ols man tripped him again. Xein was really getting annoyed. "Y'know, that is really starting to hurt." Xein stood up again but with his forehead alittle red. "Sorry youngster but I don't want you getting dirt on my clean couch." The old man explained while digging for something. When he stood up, he had a pair of new clothes for him," Here kid, your gonna need some new garments." Xein stared at the clothes, they were good looking enough but why was he giving him new ones. Xein took the clothes then realized why. "I bet you don't want be to track dirt huh?" He said putting them on behind a big book case. The old man laughed while he started digging around for something else. "If that was the case then I wouldn't have tripped you." The old man pulled out a book, it was dusty and dirty but good enough to read. Xein came out with his new clean clothes on, and he liked them in fact. He had a brown open shirt with long sleeves, a black shirt that went down to his hips. He had a black belt with an Yin and Yang sign in the middle, along with a chain at his side. He had a black baggy pants that ended to his black and white boots. Instead of looking at himself in a mirror, he plopped down on the couch. "Thanks old man, but if that isn't then why?" The old man opens the book then smiles," The clothes you had on were raggedy, you would need new ones on your journey." Xein went alittle wide eyed,"How did you know abou-", he was cut off by the old man,"Show me your keyblade." Xein just kinda stared at him,"Who is this guy?" He shrugged and reached out his hand. After that, a glow formed into his keyblade, its purple and yellow design glowed from the lights in the room. The old man smiled. "You are the one, but strange, people said that you would have brown hair." Xein did not know of what he was talking about but he just thought the old man was loosing it,"Sir, what people are you talking about." The old man tapped his chin,"I have an aquintence from another world, his name is Cid. Things are happening to the worlds these days. But you should know that, you destroyed this threat not too long ago." Xein now was very confused, he keeps saying that he saved the universe before but, he's never been anywhere outside his island,"Old man, I have no idea of what you're talking about but I have a question for you." The old man shrugged. "What is it child?" "Sir, has there been a young girl appear randomly like me?" Xein still couldn't forget his promise to himself. The old man stared blankly at him, confused now. "What are you talki-", he was interrupted by Xein,"Listen sir, this is important to me, and I need a straight answer." The old man was suprised by his outburst, he started to think," No. Theres your straight answer. But why were you wondering Sora?" Xein just stared at him for awhile,"Ummm, who's Sora?" The Old man laughed and so did Xein, but not much,"I don't get the joke." The old man stopped laughing," Wait a minute....whats your name?" "My name is Xein, why?" Xein watched the old man grab his cane and saying a word that Xein understood clearly," Hey watch it old man." The old man lifted up his cane and a knife sprang out at the bottom," Get out!!!" Xein saw this and ran out the door, when he was doing that he heard the old man cough while yelling at him. "Man whats that dudes probl-", Xein couldn't finish because he had tripped over something small. He stood back up hoping that it wasn't the old mans cane., but it wasn't. It was something loud and well known. "Whats the big idea you big palooka!!" Donald with his quacky voice stood up yelling his head off. Xein was about to laugh, I guess he finds Donalds talking skills quiet funny,"I'm sorry Mr. Duck, it won't happen again." Donald was still as steamed as ever. Suddenly there were two more voices. "Man Donald, don'tcha think you should calm down." This one sounded as wacky as Donalds voice. But the other one sounded more human, alot more human. "Sorry about this umm, whats your name?" Xein turned around and he froze to see the sight of Sora,"You....you..." Sora didn't understand but smiled," My names Sora, here next to me is Goofy. And the mad duck over there is Donald." Everything kinda went silent as Xein still stood there, he finnaly got out of his phase,"So your Sora? My name is Xein." Xein reached out his hand and Sora shook it but it was all a trap. Xein was engulfed by rage right now, everything in his dream he hated, even Sora. Xein pulled Sora close to him and slugged him right in his jaw. He let go of Soras hand after he punched him, that made Sora fall to the ground. Donald and Goofy went wide eyed as Sora landed on the ground. Sora stood up clenching his fists,"First Mulans world and now this." Sora touched his face and growled,"Whats your problem!" Xein clenched his fists, he was thinking straight because he was filled with rage. It practically ran in his vains and everywhere else on his body. Sora threw his fists up and so did Xein but was forced down by the cranky Duck. Xein struggled since Donald was on his head. Xein used his hands to throw Donald into Goofy, and Sora didn't like that. "Thats it, I tried to be nice!" A glow had formed into Soras hand, and Xein recognized its form. Sora then had Kingdom Key in his hands and was in his stance. "Thats right, you have a keyblade too..." Xein had reached out his hand and there it was, his keyblade. Sora was set back, he was suprised Xein had a keyblade. And for some reason he feels a certain deja vu feeling. Xein got into his stance and the battle was set. People started to gather around them, including Donald and Goofy. Sora and Xein charged at eachother, both angry, and both have keyblades. End of Part 2
Hmm... It's ok for a first try. I've got a couple pointers for you. 1.) Make sure you have a verb tense you use consistantly. Meaning, don't go back and forth between "was" and "is". 2.) Check your spelling and punctuation. 3.) Go a little slower. Your idea is great, but you seem to be rushing things. Take time to split sentences and divide things into paragraphs. I know it's a lot to think about when you've got all these ideas in your head, but If you take these tips seriously, I'm sure you'll be able to produce better stories in no time. It is a good idea though! Keep writing! I'll be looking to see how it turns out.
