The First Elemental

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  1. Gamefreak103 A Freak of Games

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    The First Elemental

    Chapter 0:
    The Beginning:

    One day a young boy named Aldon decided to go on his own adventures. The only problem with this plan was his village was in the middle of the ocean on an island. All Aldon wanted was to become the world’s strongest warrior, but everyone mocked him for this for the world’s strongest person was named Xana and Xana has never been defeated.
    During his childhood, he tried escaping the isle with rafts and other ways he could think of. After 16 years, he finally escaped the isle, but he didn’t hear the awful news. Something has corrupted the one named Xana and he was starting to randomly takeover different places, even if he has to use force..
    About 5 miles away from his isle on a barely stable raft, an explosion came from where his isle was. This brought fear to Aldon, the first time he has ever felt fear. After watching the blast, a shock wave brought on a title wave and it consumed Aldon and his raft.

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    Aldon woke up later on a beach where his real adventure would begin……


    Too be continued?

    My first story I created, please don’t be critical about this……

    Who knows if I will put much thought into this story or if I will continue >.>
     
  2. Quiet Elegy This is the death of beauty.

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    Seems interesting, if you do continue I would read it. It's not bad for your first story.
     
  3. true darkness Twilight Town Denizen

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    its good, a rather short intro but as they say short and sweet. Carry on going with it.
     
  4. Prince of Darkness GK Merlin's Housekeeper

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    its very good!!!!!
     
  5. Rax Traverse Town Homebody

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    continue please. I might read it.