The color of wings

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Dawn, May 19, 2008.

  1. Dawn King's Apprentice

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    darkcloud encouraged me to post another one. So here it is!
    The color of wings​


    We both know you are the fallen angel with black wings,
    the color of sin
    What would mine be then?
    You said my wings are white,
    the color of innocence
    I guess my qualities just works out that way
    Just hearing you want to keep them the same
    Makes my heart happy
    "Don't you ever change" the voice whispers in my head

    For you,
    the wings on my back will never be tainted
    My innocence and purity draws you towards me
    Like a moth to a flame
    But then again,
    I’m just like the same way myself

    I can barely see them right now
    They aren't out yet
    But I know when I'll see them
    Is it the sign of terror in my way?
    Maybe
    Either way, I will still love you

    My feelings for you doesn't separate
    where we belong in realms
    Perhaps we will be shunned from other angels
    And create one special place
    just for the two of us

    You saw how devoted I am to you
    Every detail I did is to get closer,
    making you feel distinctive from the rest

    "Ideas of a child,
    heart of an adult"
    Those words uniquely made for me
    Form from your lips
    Is like how the wind shaking the tree branches gently
    I felt like I was moved
    Because I could never identify myself like how you did

    A/N: One talk, one poem done. Cool huh?
     
  2. Darkcloud Word of advice: Let the wookie win. He's Chuck N

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    :wow: You have a knack for this...

    Very interesting, yet a little frightening, play with words. There's definitely a note of fear, yet it's obvious to see courage in this piece. Well done.
     
  3. Dawn King's Apprentice

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    Frightening? Fear? :confused: What do you mean? Aside from that, thanks again, darkcloud.
     
  4. Darkcloud Word of advice: Let the wookie win. He's Chuck N

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    I mean the way you say the 'two of you' are attracted to each other, like 'moths to a flame'...It might be me, but it sounds like even though those two love each other, to get together would mean the death of the two of them, but at the same time neither cares about that, only each other. That's what I meant by 'frightening': not sure how this will end up.
     
  5. Dawn King's Apprentice

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    I'm a n00b in this kind of thing and he has experience.
    I probably will stop this until we hang out together.
     
  6. Princess Rapunzel Flower, gleam and glow

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    Dawn, your two poems are beautiful. I could never write like that. Besides, I think it nearly reminds me of two certain angels, whose wings are white and black. If you read my poems, they're about my old life and missing someone. They're not as good as yours.:luv::o