If you ever fall in to the darkness of despair I will be your star of hope that will guild you Never give up hope, no matter how much you fall Into despair, for I will show you the way back to the light of hope As long as you never give up ------------------ I think this one is a bit bleh, so if you wanna s***t about it don't hold back
I like the connection at the end of line three to line four. Line five is good too. It's sorta cheesy otherwise. Compared to your best ones though this would receive like a 6/10. Glad your'e back into making poems though! =D
That's a lovely poem and so you! You are the light in the darkness, and you are always willing to help others.
Thanks Axe, it too go be writing poems again, and thanks for giving me 6/10 I didn't think I'd get that higha mark, i was thinking 3 lol and thanks sis, yeah I hate it when people put them selfs in the darkness of despair so I always pull them back out of it