Siners within the night of love~

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  1. Shuhbooty moon child

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    I'm not much of a writer. I'm more of a drawer, so Im sorry if this doesn't make sense.Help would be nice, I'd really appreciated it! <3
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    Prologue ~
    Rivers of blood, flowing down. Sigh. The rain pored hard tonight. “You won’t be able to tell we were here. BG will pay big money!†I didn’t care, yet another person has died at my hands, another night, again. I griped my hand hard.. My weapon if chose tonight, was my Hima. My gun, gleamed as the water flowed within itself. Reflecting off the slight glimpse site of night. I never like doing this, but it was destiny, Im told. It’s my life job, I was told. There’s nothing I can do, nothing.

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    It's a manga I've been working on. I was trying to put it into words. Dx
    I'll continue if wanted, heh. xD
     
  2. Heaven's Angel Kingdom Keeper

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    lol u used the word "Destiny"!!! XD

    I like it! It's kind of... creepy... but it's good writing, no doubt ^^

    the only problem I see is in your title. Did u mean to put Siners? or did you mean to put "Sinners"? >>
     
  3. The Fifth Element Traverse Town Homebody

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    Tis good...a wee bit confusing but good nonetheless. Please continue.


    and if you wanted me to, I can help
     
  4. Shuhbooty moon child

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    It's a Sin. xDD
    I can never get these things going, Dx

    If you want, yes please! :3