sad sundown

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  1. Dexnail Twilight Town Denizen

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    Heres another poem so enjoy


    I look at her but back to the ground,
    is our love still around,
    is our hearts connecting I wonder about that fact,
    as I look at the sun down I say to her is our love gona end like this day,
    her eyes waters she does not say,
    i try to smile or change my mind but my heart been torn and its bleeding,
    our hearts failed to provide what they been needing,
    she walks away I want to say something but I did not,
    I never saw her again but i alway see the sun going down,
    its a painfull reminder of how such a beutifull love can dissapear,
    I look at the ground and I say I wish it would reappear.
     
  2. Rainbow~Monkey Gummi Ship Junkie

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    aww, another sweet poem..but a few spelling/grammar errors..i think..nice job :)
     
  3. Dexnail Twilight Town Denizen

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  4. SoraNRikuNkairi Destiny Islands Resident

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    Few grammer/spelling errors, but other than that, it was sweet and cute <3
     
  5. Dexnail Twilight Town Denizen

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