Run away with me <3

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  1. Juicy Chaser

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    This MIGHT be edited in the future, Im a little tired right now so it'll be imperfect but I wanna write and the forum cant refuse me >8D *evil laughs*

    Anyway.. :3




    Run away with me,
    I'll hold your hand forever,
    I'll be with you through day and night
    We'll run away together.
    You'll hold me softly in your arms,
    And lift me till we fly,
    'Cause surely those are angel's wings
    That keep me in the sky.
    You cling so tight, so very tight,
    I hear the pounding of my heart,
    I know this is what was missing in life,
    The puzzle piece from the very start.
    Surely I'm just dreaming,
    I'm just scared for when I rise,
    What if all those moments were make believe?
    All those kisses under moonlit skies?
    But I shouldn't fear,
    For I wake to find,
    You right here with me.

    Finally.
    Your mine.






    This is what happens when I'm deprived of sleep and emotional *shifty eyes*

    Love you all <3
    Comments are win.
     
  2. TacoGrenade King's Apprentice

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    *sniff* that was beautiful.
     
  3. P E A N U T ~*~Never Surrender~*~

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    That was very good. The ending didn't have too much flow though. But I don't know how I would change it D=.
     
  4. Juicy Chaser

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    Thanks 8D
    xD I think I just asked you to read this and you did already :3


    Hmm..yeah...I know the ending was a little weird with the flow..

    I'd chnage it but I want it weird 8D
     
  5. P E A N U T ~*~Never Surrender~*~

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    Yup, I was one step ahead of you xD.
    You want it weird? In that case, it's perfect xD
     
  6. Forever Love Life Without Limits

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    <_<

    *is jealous of your poetry skills*

    It was really pretty and sweet, and it rhymed beautifully. Good job!
     
  7. Pure Beats~ Chaser

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    ...I'm jealous of your poetry writing skills. xDD

    That was great as well. Like P E A N U T said, the ending flow was a little weird, but it was still good.

    Great job.