Chapter 2 is out!!!! World that Never Was, on top of the big building were Deep Dive happened Axel was sitting on the top of a building. Suddenly, Larxene appeared behing him and shouted :"BOO!!!" but Axel didn't even flinched. He was used to all kinds of surprises. He asked:" What brings you here?". "Oh nothing......just something new about your so called friend and the witch." Larxene answered. Axel didn't like Larxene's tone. He asked again :" What's up?" Larxene smirked as she answered:" I have a feeling, if I ever had any, that Roxas likes that little witch.". Axel stood up, turned and looked Larxene in the eye." That's impossible. Nobodies don't have emotions. We don't have any feelings. Now if you'll kindly get out of my way....." Axel retorted. He then walked past Larxene, opened a Corridor of Darkness , and walked into it. Larxene looked at the vanishing corridor for a moment and said:" You have no idea, Axel." Twilight Town, on top of the clock tower Roxas was sitting on the ledge, eating a sea-salt icecream. "Hey Roxas." He didn't even had to look up to know that the voice came from Axel. He was also eating a sea-salt icecream. "Mind if I sit here?" Axel asked. "Sure." Roxas answered. Axel voiced his thanks and sat down beside Roxas. They were silent for a moment and then Axel broke the silence:"Larxene says that you like that Namine girl. Is that true?". Roxas was quiet for amoment, then said:" Depends on how you look at it....". Axel nodded. They watching the sunset for a moment, eating their icecreams. Axel commented:" If I was banished from the organization, this is where I would go.". Roxas replied:" You wouldn't be banished; you'd be killed.". Another silence, then "I better get back to the castle. Xenmas might want me to do something-or that Larxene will think that I'm playing hide-and-seek with Namine." Roxas said as he stood up and opened a Corridor of Darkness. Axel said:" Wait, Roxas, before you go, remember that we cannot feel any emotions. Not fear, not hate, not sadness, not love.......". Roxas nodded, and went through the corridor. Chapter 2 finished. Now to work on chapter 3. All the same, I accept and criticism or praise:P.
Suddenly, Larxene appeared behing him and shouted :"BOO!!!" but Axel didn't even flinched. That should be "flinch." =P He asked:" What brings you here?". I noticed this with some of your sentances - you put a period AFTER the quotes, even if there's a question mark or something before it. You don't need to do that. XD; If it comes out like, He asked, "What brings you here?" that, it's fine. =P Oh, and a comma (,) comes before quotes - not a colon. (:) That's it. =3 Keep it up.
Roxas and Namine - Chapter 3 World that Never Was, hallway outside White Room As Roxas appeared through his Corridor of Darkness, he immediately heard loud voices. Then he saw Larxene and Marluxia were having a shouting row. Marluxia: If she wants to go out for a moment let her go! Why come to me?? Larxene: What if she runs away? How do I explain it to the Superior huh?? Marluxia: Then don't bring her out!!! Simple as that!!! Stop bothering me!!! At that moment Roxas was already in a bad mood. He had just been called Namine's boyfriend and now this? He lost his temper straight away. Yelling at the two of them, he said,"What the hell is going on?!?! Can't some people have a bit peace around here?!?!" Larxene then looked at him, then snickered. "Well, our problems are solved. Looks like you get a date with your girlfriend Roxas." Marluxia: What?! Since when did HE had a girlfriend?! Larxene: Since that witch came to- She was cut off at that moment as Roxas had summoned his keyblade and pointed it at Larxene's throat. "Either point out what your saying or shut up Larxene," Roxas said dangerously. Larxene: That Namine girl wants to go out for a walk. She says it helps her get inspiration for her drawings or something. Problem is, no one's free to guard her. The Superior has gone to another world. Xigbar and Luxord are playing cards. Axel is missing somewhere. Saix and Lexeaus are dualling in the training room. Vexen and Zexion are doing some reserch in the laboratory. Demyx is playing his sitar so loudly that he can't even hear me. Xaldin is polishing his spears. Marluxia here is trimming his roses and me? Weeeeell......I just particularly don't like her. Marluxia: Since all of us are busy and your free.......you can bring your precious girlfriend out!!! Hahahahha!!! Roxas growled and lunged at Marluxia and Larxene, but they both laughed and dissapeared into a cloud of smoke. Furiously, he though,"Damn! Oh well, might as well bring her out since those idiots are all busy......" A few moments later..... Twilight Town, Sunset Terrance As Roxas and Namine wolked up the hill, both were thinking the same thing,"Is she/he looking at me?" Both would glace at each other for awhile and turn away. Everytime he/she caught the other looking at her/him, he/she would turn away and blush. Then suddenly, Namine slipped and almost fell but Roxas moved quickly and caught her hand. "Watch where your stepping. The soil here is pretty loose." Namine bowed her head apoligically and muttered a small thanks to Roxas. Roxas smiled at her and said,"Don't mention it," as the two continued up the small hill. When they reached the top, Namine exclaimed,"Wow, this place is beautiful." Roxas said,"It's one of my favourite places besides the clock tower. The sunset here is beautiful too, so I figured you might want to draw a picture of it." Namine replied," Wow, I don't know what to say........thanks. Oh... i almost forgot, here's the picture I drew of you. Here...have a look," as she handed Roxas the drawing. It was a drawing of Roxas in his Organization cloak holding both his keyblades, the white Oathkeepeer and the black Oblivion. At the bottom left of the picture was his name and his title."Roxas, the Key of Destiny." Roxas: It's a good drawing Namine. Namine; Thank you Roxas. You can keep it if you like. Roxas: Thanks Namine. Which reminds me, start drawing that picture of yours, we have to get back to the castle soon, or Larxene will really think we're dating or something. Namine: Roxas.......why does Larxene say we like each other? Roxas: Huh??!?!? She said that??? I don't know anything about it! Draw your picture and let's get out of here!! Roxas' voice reached such a loud tone that Namine had backed awy from him. Roxas saw what he did and immediately apologized. Roxas: Sorry.....i didn't mean to raise my voice. Sorry if I frightened you.... Namine: I'm sorry......I bought up that topic. It's my fault. I mean, we nobodies shouldn't be talking about emotions. We can't feel any........ Roxas: No...it's alright. Just.....just finish your drawing and let's get back tp the castle. Namine: Alright....... A few moments later, as Namine finished her drawing, she said,"All done. Let's go." Roxas nodded as he opened a Corridor of Darkness, and boht of them stepped in silently and dissapeared, leaving nothing but thier footprints behind to indicate that they were here. Chapter 3 finished. Working on Chapter 4 tommorow. Same as always, I accept any criticism and praise :P.
Arggggggggghhhhhhhh!!!!! Spelled "both" wrong!!!!! Oh, thanks Axelfangirl :). Arggggggggghhhhhhhh!!!!! Spelled "both" and "to" wrong!!!!! Oh, thanks Axelfangirl :).
Roxas and Namine - Chapter 4 Chapter 4 out!! I think my writing skills are going rusty..... World that Never Was, White Room Roxas and Namine had just arrived back at the White Room. Roxas: We're back now. It's getting late. You should get some rest. Namine: Alright. Goodnight Roxas. Roxas: Goodnight Namine. Saying that, Roxas left the room. After he left, Namine laid on her bad and thought of the day's events. She thought,"Do we nobodies really can't feel any emotions? Are we not capable of remembering our emotions? Oh, right, I didn't have emotions before......" Namine took another look on the picture beside her bed. It deciphered another picture of Roxas she had drawn. She drew Roxas in his organization cloak, standing beside Sora and holding his hand. She also drew a small light around Roxas entering Sora. As she though,"I wonder how it will feel like to be whole again.......Will me and Roxas ever find our original selves and become as one with them?" With those thoughts filling into her head, Namine closed her eyes and feel into deep slumber. World that Never Was, Roxas' Room Laying on his bed without changing his clothes, Roxas tried once more to sleep. He failed. Once more, sleep eluded him. Sighing, he wore his shoes and went out for a walk. World that Never Was, on the street near where Deep Dive took place A slight breeze blew on Roxas' hair as he walked past a big building (the one where Deep Dive took place). He thought,"This would make a good dualling place...". Then, he stopped and reflected on the day Larxene assumed his relationship with Namine. FLASHBACK BEGINS World that Never Was, Training Room Roxas and Axel were dualling in the Training Room. As keyblades and chakrams alike clashed with each other, they exchanged snatches of conversation. Axel: Hah! Is that the best you can do Roxas? You couldn't even hit a beserker even if it was standing still!! Roxas: Oh yeah?! Well, you couldn't even hit the twilight torn even if it was looking at you!! At that moment, Roxas spotted an opening in Axel's defense and fake slashed him in the head and then, as Axel blocked the pretend shash, leaving his waist unguarded, Roxas rammed into him and knocked him off his feet. He yelled,"It's over Axel!!" At that moment, Xemnas lead Namine through the dualling room. Xemnas: Make way please. Coming through....... Roxas: Who is she? (he didn't know Namine's name at that time.) Xemnas: Her name is Namine. We found her laying unconscious near the castle and brought her in. She told us that she could manipulate the memories of those people related to Sora. We believe she may be of use to us. Roxas: Sora............. During that moment that Roxas was thinking about Sora, Axel decided to get even and hurled his chakrams at Roxas' body. Roxas, hearing the deadly whistle of the chakrams slicing through the air, leap away. But the chakrams continued onwards towards Namine. Roxas, suddenly sensing a feeling of protection toward Namine, leap in front of the chakrams and tried to stop them with his keyblades, but the chakrams slammed into his waist before he could react. the last thing he felt was Namine running towards him and holding his head up. Then, he passed out. World that Never Was, Infirmary Roxas woke up, his head feeling groggy. He thought,"That Axel, I am so gonna kill him for this." The image of Namine focused as he opened his eyes. He said,"Whoa, what happened.......The last thing I remembered was being hit by Axel's chakrams and then you lifted up my head. Then what happened? Correct me If i'm wrong at this point." Namine smiled and said,"You're alright! You're so far correct. After I held up your head, Xemnas and Axel pulled me away and carried me to the infirmary. Xenmas called a woman named Larxene to bring me to a room, but I insisted to came to the infirmary. I've been here ever since." Roxas smattered, not being used to being cared by someone else."Thanks Namine, for looking after me. I don't know what else to say." Namine giggled and answered,"Thanks is enough. You saved me from those chakrams, remember?" After a few moments........ Roxas stood up from his bed. He said,"I feel better already. Thanks Namine." Namine answered," Sure, I'll be seeing you around, Roxas." Then, Roxas left the building, leaving Namine in the room. World that Never Was, hallway outside the Infirmary Larxene was standing outside the Infirmary. Her ear was all the time towards the door of that room. As she heard footsteps approaching the door, she put her wear away and stood beside the door. Sure enough, Roxas opened the door and went out. Larxene looked at him and smirked. Larxene: Feeling better already? Something that witch gave you? Roxas. Yes and no. And don't call her a witch. Her name is Namine. Larxene smirked again. She was getting to the point now. Roxas, seeing Larxene smirking, asked, "What? Do I have food on my face?" Larxene: You actually like that witch don't you? Roxas: I told you. Her name is Na-Whaaaaaaat? Why would you say that? There's nothing between me and her. Larxene pointed to her ears and said, "I have ears you know. And from what I've heard, you adn her seem to make a cute couple. Roxas: There are such things as invasion of privacy you know. Larxene: Apparantly there are no laws here, So, if you want to protect your little secret......you have t- Roxas lost his temper and summoned his keyblades. Charging at Larxene, he yelled,"SHUT UP!!!" That was enough to conclude Larxene's theory. Smirling as she evaded Roxas' blow, she dissapeared into a cloud of smoke. Roxas was furious. He yelled,"COME OUT YOU B-"A small voice inturrupted his rants. It came from Namine, who was standing in front of the Infirmary door. "Roxas....?" FLASHBACK ENDS Roxas sighed. From that day onwards, the Organization members kept calling Roxas to do things involving Namine, smirking everytime they did. Roxas was 100 percent sure that Larxene had 'accidentally' (as Larxene had said to him) leaked out his so called secret. Roxas sighed again. From what Namine had told him about her past, the circumstances of her birth seemed similar to his own. he had befriended Namine because he felt that he had to talk about the meaning of his existance to someone who felt like him, in this case Namine. It didn't have anything to do with love, did it......? Sighing again, Roxas opened a Corridor of Darkness and went through it to go back to his room. Upon laying on his bed, he almost immediately fell asleep. Notes: This is a summary of what happened in the "after a few moments" in the Infirmary. Roxas asked Namine how she was born as a nobody. After she answered his question, Roxas knew taht the circumstances of her brth as a nobody was similar tohis own. And so, he decided to befriend Namine. Chapter 4 out!! Sorry if the quality is not as good as the other 3 chapters. Still accept any form of criticism or praise :P. Note 2: Please tell me who should be mean to Namine in the next chapter. Any Organization 13 members except Roxas can be chosen. I guess you readers are wondering why there are TWO chapter 4s. Well....I went through the first one and it had tons of spelling mistakes in it. So, I went clicked back and corrected the spelling errors and published it. But now, I have TWO chapter 4s. Read the one posted later (AKA this one). Anyone knows how to delete a thread, please help me!!!!!
