I wrote a poem :) The young boy sat In his copper-plated home A mechanical brat With skin made of chrome His eyes are webcams His legs a mass of bolts Weighing 20 kilograms Powered by volts It was quite sad He could not cry Could not be glad No tear or glee in his eye He was heartless Without emotion He was artless Nothing but mechanical motion
tommy was very moved by this and gus doid something stupid THAT POEM WAS AWESOME I especially like the last verse it's just really griping and moving...you're a great poet...You should write more :)
This is a clever poem, I really like some of the language used and the rhyming doesn't feel forced which is quite common in a lot of poems. The only line I disliked was "No tear or glee in his eye" because the rhymthm doesn't fit the rest of the stanza.
Yeah I didn't really get that when I read it over in my head but I read it aloud and I think it sounds weird. :)
