Remember Me?

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  1. Sabby Sleepy Panda Assassin

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    FINE YOU CAUGHT ME... I cannot be torn away from this place because I love you freaks so much. >>
    Ehh I just want to reach prem.. then leave.. so you still got a good year from me.

    ANYWAYS SORRY ABOUT THE SPAM
    I have a poem that I wrote for my english class

    Remember me?


    I remember this girl,
    Stunning blue eyes
    And charcoal black hair.
    She had a perfect life,
    Perfect family
    Perfect friends
    She was only five years old.

    She was always smiling,
    Always was polite.
    Always waved hello
    To her neighbors and friends
    She was smart
    She was pretty.
    She was only eight years old.

    One day her perfect life
    Was shattered by a bullet
    All she remembers was the red and white sirens
    On the ambulance
    And the stretcher that was covered with an orange blanket
    The only body part she saw was
    A hand with a beautiful diamond ring on it
    The person she had loved was now gone
    Her heart shattered to pieces
    She was only eleven years old

    Couple years have past
    Since that tragic accident
    Her father was still with her
    But focuses more attention to his work
    She was all alone
    No one to talk to
    She rather be alone
    She was only fifteen years old

    She started skipping meals
    Skipping classes
    She got thinner and thinner everyday
    People were worried
    People were scared
    What happened to that sweet little girl
    That always knew what to say
    Ever since that day
    Her life stopped in its tracks
    That little girl once before
    Is now a young adult
    Having trouble going through life
    Not being able to move on
    She suffered
    She feared
    She was only nineteen years old

    Things started to get better
    She met a young man
    A sweet caring lovely man
    Slowly her heart was being put
    Back together again
    That lovely smile she once had
    Was now back on her face
    She loved him and he loved her
    They had a beautiful wedding
    And had two children

    My name is Madeline
    This is my story
    This is who I was
    This is who I am now
    This is my life
     
  2. Near Gummi Ship Junkie

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    =O Cute <3

    I love this ^^ Keep up the good work! <3
     
  3. Nailpolish <3 Hollow Bastion Committee

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    AH! Sabby thats beautiful!!

    Great Job. My poems were crap xD
    I typed them up in 10 minutes.

    This is truely great! Amazing Job :D
     
  4. JellyBeing ALL. THE. BUTTS.

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    Oh wow.
    A truely wonderful poem, great job.

    :D



    Post more soon.
     
  5. The Great Gatz Chaser

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    I like it. I can't wait to see more. Of course I like something that would have no happy ending but I liked it :) Great job!
     
  6. Destined Working for WDW

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    very deep and sincere, I especially like the metaphor uses. My only comment is that the line:

    "Always was pretty"

    Always and was don't seem like they mesh..but could just be me.

    Glad you see you back and hope to read more soon!!