Really nice poem^^What do you think?

I looked into your eyes and saw
A world that does not exist
I looked into your eyes and saw
A world I wish I was in

I'll never find someone quite as touched
As you
I'll never love someone quite the way that I
Loved you


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I think it is really nice what do you think?^^

And if you don't like it read this:

Respond nice not like:
It was f****** ugly blablabla !!

Respond and give a reson why you do not like it :
I did not like it because .......

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Common what do you think?^^

 

I wish I was in world that does not exist that I saw in your eyes...wow that has a lot of feeling in it. Nice poem.

 

Simple and sweet.

I can't say I'm an expert on poetry, but I really liked it. It's down to earth and straight to the point, but leaves enough room for personal interpretation. As well, your meter's easy to follow and your use of repetition is effective.

Well done.

 

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Glad you liked it^^
But I didn't make it I just think it is so nice,that I decided to put it up here.
Its has a little kh feeling over it (:

 

I liked how it was written..the structure.
The verses weren't the greatest but the structural support seemed to balance it.

 

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Okay,
That is one way looking at it^^.
yeah, I agree the structure is good.

 

That was a good poem. Nice job.

 

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I agree it is a really good poem !^^
But I did not make it ,I just think it is so nice that it deserves a spot here.

 

It's a really sweet and at the while sentimental poem. Axel and...uh...fella/lady with japanese characters (we're in an english speaking site here!) basically summed up what I had to say about it :3 Do you know who wrote it? It would be nice to read more from that person.




(IS THIS INDIRECTLY DEDICATED TO ME?!?! =D =D =D =D)

 

Yes, and that's why I post in English. :)

I'd also be interested in seeing more of this poet's work, actually.

 

Lol obviously. But how do you pronounce the characters?

 

Ro-ku-sa-su = Roxas.

But seeing as there is already a resident Roxas on the forum, my former name 'Soushirei' is what some people who knew me back then call me by around here.

 

YeaH^^

Umm
I agree with you StupidAquarius(Fairy^^<3)
I really agree with you about the poem.
I don't know who wrote it T__T;
I just got in to a page a long time ago and I had no idea what the site was about and then I saw that beautiful poem.
I think the site was some thing FF to do ? I don't remember.
And my StupidAquarius I think the poem have to be dedicated to you and Sora <3

And about the signs: I think they are funny, I would love to understand Japanese signs^^

 

...OH. Oh right lol, as if I needed more evidence D8 I should've just guessed that it was Roxas and made as if I understood japanese to look cultural 8B

That's a shame, Elfy, you don't know who did it! I wouldda loved to read more from that person ;_; Ah well.

LOL - to me and Sora!!! Naah, it would fit better for Sora and Ri-ahem, I mean Kairi XD

 

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Yeah shame on me because I don't know D:
Ho hum yaoi fan Fairy?^^
Its fine by me, SoraXriku (StupidAquarius opinion?) SoraXKairi(My opinion)

 

Yosh! Very well written! Beats my poetry. Hoo ah! ^^

 

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Yeah I agree its nice.
But I did not make it (unfortunately^^)