AN: This is my first Falling Skies Fanfic and I hope everyone enjoys it! I like to thank my beta readers Libquedation of Fanfiction.net and Saxima of the KH Vids.net forums. I’d also like to thank CocoaHazelnutCoffee of Wattpad for making my cover for Wattpad. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Parachute: Falling Skies Fanfic Chapter 1 I stood in the hall of the infirmary, wondering if I should go in or not. I heard Ben wake up and I felt happiness grow in me. My best friend… My god-cousin… The one everyone always called my twin because we were born on the same day… He remembered. I was just so happy… He remembered Uncle Tom and Hal and Mattie. He wasn’t like Ricky who didn’t remember anything. Ben remembered! I was happy and wanted to see him but…he needs the time with his family…his real family… Not his crazy, loveable god-cousin. “Hey Ben. You’re going to be okay now right?” I heard Matt ask. “Yeah.” Ben said. He sounded like he was smiling… It would be nice to see that again. “Hey um... Hal?” I heard Ben say. “Yeah?” “You saved me. Me and the other harnessed kids, right?” “Yup.” “Thanks, bro.” “Well, what are big brothers for?” “For the little brothers to drive them crazy!” piped up Matt. I laughed as well as everyone in the room- even Anne. “Well, why aren’t you in there?” said a voice from in front of me. I opened my eyes; they had been closed so I could focus on hearing what was being said in the room. I hadn’t realized that Margret was standing right in front of me. She moved and sat to the right of me. “I said why aren’t you in there?” she repeated. “They need to be a family - one without a third wheel for once in almost two years,” I replied. “Are you stupid? They think of you as their family. I’ve heard Hal slip a few times and call you his sister, I’ve heard Tom call you his daughter. I even once or twice heard Matt call you his sister and I’m sure it’s the same for Ben. Even if you aren’t related by blood, you ARE as good as a Mason.” she said to me. I let her words sink into me. Maybe I really was being stupid. Tom was like a father to me and Hal and Matt were like brothers…but Ben? I don’t think we could be called brother and sister since we were almost dating right before all this **** with the aliens happened. I still loved Ben. I really loved him. I missed him so much. Why was I over thinking- “Dad?” “Yeah Ben?” I heard Uncle Tom answer. “Where’s Adri?” “Um… She’s… Hey Anne? Where is Adrianna? Wasn’t she with you?” "She was helping clean up after Sarah’s baby shower. I thought she’d be here by now.” said Anne who I guessed was cleaning up after all the surgeries. “It’s that enough for you, Adrianna?” Margret said with a slight smirk on her face. “Thank you.” I whispered. I stood up and stood in the doorway. I saw Ben and I smiled. He was really here. He was finally safe. I breathed a sigh of relief. “Hey Ben.” I said quietly, a smile slowly creeping on my face. “Hey Adri.” he responded easily. “You’re back.” “I’m home.” I walked over to him a gave him a kiss on the cheek. “I’m sorry…” I mumbled. “If I had-“ “Then maybe what? You would have got harnessed too? It wasn’t your fault, okay?” “But -" “Okay, Adri?” “Alright.” I was about to grab a chair when Anne moved it away. “No, no, no. It’s getting late! All of you get out of here and let him rest.” “Can I at least help you clean up?” I asked. Anne was about to shake her head when she looked around at the room; it was a mess to say the least. I was about to say something when Uncle Tom shook his head. “I’ll help you Anne.” he said. “I just need to grab something.” “Bye Ben!” Matt said. “See you in the morning, little bro.” Hal said. “I’m happy your back. I really missed you,” I said, a smile forming on my face. “I’m happy to be back.” Ben said, returning my smile. I left the room with Tom, Matt and Hal. I really didn’t want to leave, but I knew I had to. Ben needed sleep. Hal needed sleep. Matt needed sleep and I did too. I turned back to waved to Anne and Ben. Anne waved back for both of them and I smiled. I knew that tonight I could finally sleep in peace…
I've never heard of Falling Skies, but this wasn't too bad. I probably should get into this series until I make a remark, but for now I'll say that if you were going for a script format, I'd say you did well, but you should always mark who is speaking. EX: the nurse that tells them to leave. There was no indication, but my mind pieced it together. And if your going for a novel like setting, perhaps a little more action, so I can really see what's happening. Other than that, nice start, keep it up:)
Thank You so much <3 I highly recommend Falling Skies. Sadly it's only 10 episodes and the next season isn't until next summer.
